What is ypiur openion about QR code, Augmented reality and PointArt?

  • James Bower

    James

    James Bower

    Communication Design

    What’s ypiur openion?

  • Ananda Jagoda

    Ananda

    Ananda Jagoda

    Chief Creative Officer at Smart Media – The Annual Report Company

    What is your openion about QR code, Augmented reality and PointArt?

  • Ananda Jagoda

    Ananda

    Ananda Jagoda

    Chief Creative Officer at Smart Media – The Annual Report Company

    What is your openion about QR code, Augmented reality and PointArt?

  • James Bower

    James

    James Bower

    Communication Design

    I think my opinion is different than your openion. Since you’re starting the conversation it is usually customary for you to offer your openion first. People are more likely to reply and share their opinions or openion as part of a shared dialogue that you get rolling. Perhaps you have some links to relevant articles on the subjects of QR code, Augmented Reality, and Point Art?

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  • donald Lais

    donald

    donald Lais

    instructor at Art Institute of Las Vegas

    QR codes are tools for communication. What do you intend to do with QR coded messages? 

    They’re easy to create and are useful for the right venue. 

    I recently worked with a very small church on a variety of projects. They wanted to incorporate a QR code on their church bulletin. With QR, the members could scan the bulletin and get pertinent information like church times, phone number, help, website info, etc. All by scanning the church bulletin with their smart phone, even between hymns. This info then could be instantly exported to their contact list on their phone or their home computer. They then can export that info to their Facebook page along with their contacts that they wished to share with their fellow worshippers.

  • Joseph Edward Rozzo

    Joseph Edward

    Joseph Edward Rozzo

    Creative Director at Rozzo Film

    QR codes are fine but limited to a refered web site. Augmented reality is more flexible because you can link anything you want onto, over or about what’s in front of you. The first, QR, doesn’t require much, just use it; the second, AR, requires content adapted to the smart phone environment. I haven’t the slightest idea what Point Art is.

  • Jean Minthe

    Jean

    Jean Minthe

    at Anduba

    What exactly is your point Ananda? These are interesting technologies with a deep impact on advertising/consuming… but if you want to engage thread you’ll have to be a little more engaged and challenging yourself ; )

  • Geoff Bush

    Geoff

    Geoff Bush

    Artist – I Ching Arts

    Perhaps Ananda is simply trying to learn without coloring the discussion with his opinion which would more likely encourage a discussion about his point of view. Attacking the question does little to answer his request for information or guidance. In the words of Dennis Miller, “That’s just my opinion, I could be wrong.”

Hi guys. What do u say about putting images on business cards. Arent words not enough to say what you do..

  • Philippe Ingels

    Philippe

    Philippe Ingels

    Utilising the power of Characters and Visual Storytelling to deliver business objectives

    Use visuals if words are not enough to express everything you want to communicate.

  • Leila Cook

    Leila

    Leila Cook

    Digital art and photography at Self Employed

    Are you talking about not using any logos or any visuals? Because I think that a logo would be paramount to your brand and would be necessary to reinforcing your business to whomever gets the card. Other than that, I would say the simplest method of getting the info you wish to express on there, the better. If someone has to spend more than a few seconds trying to figure out what you do, they will more than likely be on to the next thing. Sad but true.

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  • Begoña lafuente lopez

    Begoña

    Begoña lafuente lopez

    Art Direction- Corporate Image

    An image is more powerful than 1000 words. It is eaisy to remember and recognize among other stuff in your wallet…

     Maja K.Marie R. like this

  • Josh Ross

    Josh

    Josh Ross

    Commercial Portrait and Still Life Photographer

    Call me old school but I believe a business card should be a classy affair. Beautiful stock, uncoated, no pictures, and I’m a photographer.

     Rita C.Denise L. and 1 other like this

  • Lori Quarnstrom

    Lori

    Lori Quarnstrom

    Managing Consultant at IBM

    It depends on one’s value proposition, I think. We pick up a lot of cards at art fairs. An image on the card reminds us why we found the artist interesting, and is more likely to prompt us to make a follow-up contact. Same with a card that has a well-designed logo for a graphic artist. 

    For someone like me (a business analyst), the main value I provide takes the form of well-organized words. The only image that matters on my card is the logo of the company I work for. :-)

     zan klainDenise L. and 3 others like this

  • Carolyn Stubbs

    Carolyn

    Carolyn Stubbs

    Press Secretary at Newlyn ARCHIVE

    As an artist, it’s important to have an image of my work on my cards. In fact I have two! 
    A visual artist with no images won’t work.

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  • barbara bogue

    barbara

    barbara bogue

    Creative Services / MarCom Manager at SchoolDude.com

    … and whose to say your words can’t also be images? Creative typography can make as much of a statement as other conventional images. A business card is both a mini-billboard (it should communicate the what and an emotional “why do I care”) as well as a rolodex (old-school word, I know) index of all the vital information someone would need to follow-up with you. 

    Images? Definitely! But be discerning with what and how.

     Sylvia V.Cate C. and 2 others like this

  • Paul

    Paul Fontéyne

    Situation review

    Hey Allan do what you want, it’s your card, it’s your business. Good luck.

  • Cate Calson

    Cate

    Cate Calson

    Web Graphic Designer, Illustrator and Photographer

    These responses are as diverse and varied as our business cards. I enjoy and celebrate variety, it’s what colors my world. Your card is your brand. Who is Your market audience? If you are into focusing on a target then your card is designed for the market audience you want to attract. Know your audience.

  • Mike Pascale

    Mike

    Mike Pascale

    Freelance Writer/Storyboardist/Creative Dept. for Advertising and Entertainment

    An artist not having an image on his/her card is like a writer not having words. 

    Plus, we live in a visual era–an appropriate image will make your card stand out from all the traditional ones. (Emphasis on “appropriate”…bad/cluttered visuals will make it worse than no visuals.) 

    Best of success, Allan!

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  • Allan Murahwa

    Allan

    Allan Murahwa

    Graphic Designer

    Thanks guys – very informative. I proposed a business card to my client who does transport, catering and tours. I had these written clearly and he wants more to that i.e. image of each service he is providing. Well, I have since designed one with 3 images and he is quite happy with it. At the end i don’t only want to satisfy a client just ’cause I ve done what he wants but also doing the right thing as a professional designer.

     W. Robert D.Mike Pascale and 1 other like this

  • Fred S Goldberg

    Fred S

    Fred S Goldberg

    ExAdman/ExMadman

    This happens to be a great idea if you put on good concept. My new book http://www.theinsanityofadvertising.com is featured on the back of my business card right next to the TV show poster for Mad Men. Above the Mad Men poster the headline is “Fantasy”: Above the book cover for The Insanity of Advertising is “Reality”. It works!

  • Deborah M. Budd

    Deborah M.

    Deborah M. Budd

    Web Content Developer/Editor for Advertising Agency Network Second Wind

    Images help with recall and emotional connection, so I would vote for visuals other than type. But as Barbara suggested above, typography can also be an “image.” It sounds like you arrived at a mutually satisfactory solution. Ultimately, if you and the client are happy with the design, and it fulfills the function, you have done your job as a designer.

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  • Kaboom J. Schneider

    Kaboom J.

    Kaboom J. Schneider

    Content writing, blogging and digital graphics

    Have you seen the augmented reality business cards? Check out examples on YouTube. If you don’t have one now, you will need one soon!

Aside

What is the best way to create digital letterhead templates in Word? I’ve imported my designed header (as eps/text as outlines), and it still prints blurry. Would love advice! Maybe Word not best?

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  • Daniel Bruni

    Daniel

    Daniel Bruni

    Graphic Designer

    If by digital letterhead you mean for viewing on a screen or emailing, Word probably isn’t the best. 
    I use InDesign (or Illustrator) and save out as a pdf. You have full control of layout, etc, an any imported vector elements like an Illustrator logo remain sharp (dependent on quality level of pdf you save to). Any almost anybody can read/print pdf files. 
    If you still want/need to use Word, it doesn’t like eps files so you can try jpg or png files so they don’t appear as blurry.

  • Sarah Fey

    Sarah

    Sarah Fey

    Owner, Sarah Fey Design

    Thank you for your response Daniel. But can the client use the pdf to type his letter into? I know there is the typewriter tool, but I’ve found that pretty clunky. And I’m not sure you can set up second pages. How do you handle this part? Thanks!

  • Mayumi Lennane

    Mayumi

    Mayumi Lennane

    freelance – script writer stylist photographer

    If you use apple ,goto applestoar.another one goto electronics store !!!!!
    stuff teach you! 
    good lack*******Mayumi*

  • Kerry Jenkins

    Kerry

    Kerry Jenkins

    Associate Professor of Graphic Design at Methodist University

    MS Word = word processing. And that’s about it. Typography, page layout, graphic imports, .eps, .ai, really aren’t part of its vocabulary. But, in adding to what Daniel said, if you really need to use Word, it can import jpegs and tiffs.

  • Sarah Fey

    Sarah

    Sarah Fey

    Owner, Sarah Fey Design

    Think I solved it. Import a png file into Word, NOT jpg, tiff, eps. Obviously the color won’t be perfect as it’s rgb, but then again there’s no such thing as perfect in Word. Friend sent me this article on the subject. Entertaining and helpful. http://www.creativepro.com/article/hergeekness-says-convert-custom-letterhead-to-microsoft-word-templates

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  • Mayumi Lennane

    Mayumi

    Mayumi Lennane

    freelance – script writer stylist photographer

    In Japan has got How to use word and exsel,It is a book!!!! may In America too!

  • Daniel Bruni

    Daniel

    Daniel Bruni

    Graphic Designer

    Sarah, didn’t register that you were trying to do for a client until after I commented. Only other thing I could add is if — and it is a big if — the client has Acrobat, they could take advantage of combining separate pdf pages as layers. Advantage is client could use specific fonts that won’t default to whatever end user has and won’t be sending an editable file. Kind of clumsy, but if control is important, might work. Good luck.

  • Mayumi Lennane

    Mayumi

    Mayumi Lennane

    freelance – script writer stylist photographer

    NY 5ave has got apple store!!!!

  • Tony Vernon

    Tony

    Tony Vernon

    Principal at Prism Design Group

    Use .png file format… I’d do it as a full page size image and lock it…

  • David Sharp

    David

    David Sharp

    MD at Sharp Creative, Cambridge, UK

    Hi Sarah, So you are trying to create a template for your client? As you’ve discovered; I have found png the best option. Microsoft office only recognises RGB so there’s no point losing sleep over that. It is also necessary to choose “format picture”, select “behind text” and “advanced” options; then “Absolute position” relative to page (rather than column or paragraph) before selecting “Lock Anchor”. I believe that there is also a way to design a template for follow-on pages, but I have never found out how to do this.

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  • Sarah Fey

    Sarah

    Sarah Fey

    Owner, Sarah Fey Design

    Thank you David! This is really helpful. You can design templates for follow-on pages. Go to Format > Document > Layout and then check “Different First Page.” All the best and thanks again.

Communication Arts

If you could package one message today in a bottle for someone to find years from now on a distant shore, what would your message have said?

Terms in graphic design that drive you crazy!!!!!

UX Designer/Developer, IA, Web Design, Motion Graphics, Game Developer, Animator, Author, Illustrator, Artist, Front End

CLEAN – Tired of hearing it. I’m a designer not janitor. I know what you’re getting at when you say it but it’s been said too much over the years and it just irritates me. What’s a graphic design term do you hate?

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Good Writing

  • EXIT STRATEGY- By Christina Hamlett 

    She saw them as she emerged from Zoe Boutique. Even at a distance, she could feel the awkward weight of their stares and to sense – without even hearing it – that her trio of friends had abruptly changed their conversation as if caught in an embarrassing discourse. Would they cross the street to comfort her, she wondered, or had the scandal of her husband’s confession suddenly reduced her to the status of social pariah? Who among them hadn’t experienced the same shame of infidelity yet still lived to tell about it, comfortable in donning society’s sympathetic label of “victim.” 

    ****** 
    The lead character is Sarah Mercer, wife of a high-ranking military officer in the president’s inner circle. Matthew’s admission of an affair removes him from testifying in a globally combustible hearing but an aggressive reporter sees a darker truth that jeopardizes national security.

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  • Amos Parker

    Amos

    Amos Parker

    Novelist at his house.

    Blood. 
    Michael’s eyelids rose, as if sticky with it, drying blood flowing through his ducts, over his irises, pupils, and whites. 
    He saw red. 
    No. It wasn’t in his eyes. It was out there, beyond them, radiating from an eyeball sphere hovering high, and hot over his head. He blinked. His eyes moistened. His hands came up from somewhere to rub them. 
    Dirt. 
    Where? And then… who? 
    Dirt clung to his palms and fingers. It sifted into his eyes, and then he realized he hurt, all over, pain subsuming a stony artifact of fatigue. He couldn’t rise, just yet. His head made small swings, side to side, his eyelids closing, opening, and squeezing again, trying to get the fine grit out without the aid of filthy nails.

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  • Karl Wiggins

    Karl

    Karl Wiggins

    Health and Safety Advisor

    Cab Driver (it’s on Amazon): 

    This is a true story about cab drivers. What they are really like. 

    Between the innocence of infancy and the recklessness of humanity lies a being known as a cab driver. Cab Drivers can be found in bars, in arguments, in bed, in debt, intoxicated and sometimes in cabs. They are tall, thin, dark, fair, fat, but never normal. They hate healthy food, tax returns, traffic and most passengers. They like tips, nude pin-ups, sympathy, complaining and beer. A cab driver’s secret ambition is to change places with the owner of a cab firm, to win the lottery and to be loved by everyone who gets in his cab. A cab driver is Sir Galahad when taking a stripper to her next gig, a psychoanalyst with a couple of drunks in the back seat and a battered old copy of Reader’s Digest in the glove box, Don Quixote on his days off, the saviour of mankind with his back teeth awash, Valentino with a tenner in his pocket and democracy personified when dealing the police

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  • Karl Wiggins

    Karl

    Karl Wiggins

    Health and Safety Advisor

    The Opening Line (also on Amazon) 

    The opening line of a book, or a short story for that matter, is possibly the most important but also the hardest line to write. It’s the line that has to grab the reader by the scruff of the neck and make him read the second line, which in turn has to encourage him to finish the page and keep turning, and as such we really need to give it the respect it deserves. I liken the opening line of a book to walking in a restaurant. If the restaurant is set up in such a way that you sense the buzz immediately and find yourself rubbing imaginary hands together thinking to yourself, “Oh yes, this looks like the place, we’re going to have fun tonight, I can’t wait to view the menu,” then the restaurant has written their opening line correctly.

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  • Gemma Mawdsley

    Gemma

    Gemma Mawdsley

    Horror Writer

    Death Cry by Gemma Mawdsley 
    The sun had set on what was a very warm midsummer’s day in Ireland. It no sooner disappeared below the horizon, than it was replaced by the full moon. The glowing red clouds left behind with the promise of a warmer day to come, reached out caressed the moon and turned it to blood. An uneasy quiet shrouded the countryside. Night creatures rose from slumbering to begin their nocturnal foraging, tiny grey bats swooped through the still air and the call of the night owl was heard from deep within the forests. It was a night like any other, until the wailing started.

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  • Bill Henderson

    Bill

    Bill Henderson

    Writer at HubPages

    Empire 

    As he topped the small rise, Ben Tower sat his horse a moment and surveyed the mid-western prairie stretched out before him. The late afternoon breezes formed long, rolling waves in the tall grasses, stretching to the horizon in all directions. He hadn’t seen a tree in over a week, and the relentless monotony of the grasslands had been known to drive some men insane. Lesser men had taken one look at its vast emptiness and had gone straight back home. 

    To the east, the prairie was vanishing by the day, falling victim to the slow but relentless plow. 

    “Empire” is the story of Ben Tower, who, along with a young woman abandoned by a wagon train, builds vast new holdings out of the early western frontier.

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  • Skip Knox

    Skip

    Skip Knox

    Web Programmer at Boise State University

    Why would we do this? There’s no critiquing, no contacts are made. This seems like a pointless exercise.

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  • Marie Lavender

    Marie

    Marie Lavender

    Romance Author

    Title: A Misplaced Life by Kathryn Layne (other pen name) 
    Character: Alexa Hamilton 
    Summary: When Alexa discovers herself beyond the land of the living, she must enlist the help of her best friend and a handsome, but stubborn detective to try to put the missing pieces of her life back together. 

    Death was only the beginning. I could never have imagined that a life could be taken so quickly and yet still have more to offer. 
    No one knew what happened. All they knew was they saw me at the party, soaking up all of the attention and having the time of my life, and then I disappeared around midnight. I imagine no one saw me coming or going. 
    But, something did happen to me and one person was responsible. He would never admit to what happened. Perhaps even he would learn to forget my face as I pleaded for breath.

  • Viorica (Violet) Vandor

    Viorica (Violet)

    Viorica (Violet) Vandor

    Published author and illustrator of children books

    Title: Steven Smith – adventures in the world of magic (YA fantasy-adventure) 
    Main character: Steven Smith 
    Summary: 
    Stevie, a ten-year-old child, is sent to a boarding school far away from his mother, his classmates and friends. Overnight the Stevie’s world is turned upside down. As if all this were not enough, a guinea pig that came from Wonderland, tells Stevie, that the life of Andrew, a boy turned into a ghost, depends on his courage and devoted helpfulness.. 
    …………………………………….. 
    He did not utter a word while his mother held him tight and kissed his pale face yet again. Although he was close to tears, he gathered strength and stood stiffly in the middle of the room tightening his lips to keep himself from crying out for his mother. As soon as the door closed and he was by himself he felt completely out of his depth. Not holding back anymore, he threw himself onto the bed burying his face into the soft pillows. Feeling absolutely hopeless he burst into tears.

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  • Jan Mulligan

    Jan

    Jan Mulligan

    Author, “Smuggler’s Legacy,” and “A Square of Apples.”

    SMUGGLER’S LEGACY: A BRETON SAILOR’S ADVENTURE 

    Christmas Eve, 1802, St. Anne’s Cemetery. Dark of the moon. Behind the tall granite Mariner’s Obelisk, Mikal Poulier huddled in his fur-lined cloak. His whispers puffed vapor and curses. “Damn him for making me wait!” Poulier gripped the silver wolf’s head of his walnut walking stick and held his breath; the Town Watch strolled past under the shadows of their whale-oil lamps. Another fractious sea wind skirled from the wharf, past the Coast Guard station and the Prancing Ermine Tavern, all the way to The Mermaid, Concarneau’s last working brothel. In the darkness a voice chuckled. “Mind that language; we’re on hallowed ground.” 

    —– 

    Master Mariner Louis Bedard seeks a suitable husband for his contrary daughter, while reluctantly navigating an unreliable smuggling partnership and avoiding arrest by Pierre LaMotte, Concarneau’s secretive and ruthless Coast Guard Captain.

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  • E.VAn Johnson

    E.VAn

    E.VAn Johnson

    Lecturer/Creative writing/ Author/ Journalist

    Lost to the sea. 

    The boy was in his element, he could hardly contain his excitement as the small coble danced over the waves like a lively young colt kicking her heels. The heavy canvas lug sail stood hard as iron in the stiff breeze. The old man felt the tiller kick like a living thing as the sea rose up astern. Gently he eased the head of the boat to leeward skilfully counteracting the press of canvas trying to force the boat’s head up into the wind. 
    “Here Jamie lad,” he called, “take the tiller.” His voice was deep and strong and carried easily against the rush of the wind and the crash of the sea against the stout wooden hull. 
    The boy was standing in the prow, his dark hair tousled by the wind. The old man noted the gleam in the lad’s eye as he worked his way aft, his slight body swaying nimbly to the roll and lurch of the coble as she charged over the wildly tossing waves.

  • Robert

    Robert F.

     

    Going Under 
    Main Char. :Jason Sten 
    Recovering undercover policeman goes undercover in rehab. 

    Book One 
    Who is Jason Sten? 
    That’s what some people asked, including himself on occasion His higher power, Jasoni, knew more than most, but, it wasn’t within the responsibilities of a higher power to disclose, so kept private….

  • Mirta Oliva

    Mirta

    Mirta Oliva

    Author, Visual artist, Illustrator

    SUBLIME ADOPTION ~ A Tale of Love and Mendacity – BY Mirta Oliva (Revised 3/4/13 – Main character: Kate) “And his voice was like an inspiring murmur that kept the studious girls in the American literature class in sublime meditation – hiding a myriad of inner emotions. It was the soft, engaging voice of Mr. Edward Porterlang. As many times before, the professor was reading Edgar Allan Poe’s poem The Raven with a most sensual inflection each time he whispered “nevermore.” I will admit to being one of the girls… Just as them, I would listen to the very attractive teacher with an intent gaze and disbelief. Were we possessed by his handsomeness and unique enunciation or was it the…” 

    About the selfish, egotistical actions of two young adults quickly maturing by the forces of life turns and poor choices. The latter got them deeper and deeper into a tumultuous sea of mendacity very difficult to escape from.

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  • Paula Friedman

    Paula

    Paula Friedman

    Novelist–debut antiwar novel (2012)

    Good writing, Karl Wiggins. My ex drove a cab for some years, and, though I’m not sure “beer” covers the diversity of cabbies’ recreation, you’ve mostly really caught the mode! 
    In fact, lots of good writing in these excerpts, people.

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  • Mirta Oliva

    Mirta

    Mirta Oliva

    Author, Visual artist, Illustrator

    Skip Knox, you have a valid question and I will give you my own opinion of why many of us do it. It is free and will be seen by peers and others, hopefully. Strictly speaking about published works, if anyone has an interest on one of these books based on the limited information provided here, they will do a title or author search and, most likely, will be able to find the book somewhere. Usually, there will be a free sample that will allow the interested reader to immerse himself/herself on the story or, at least a synopsis that will provide some insight as to what’s to be expected. At that point, that curious person will borrow or buy the book or abandon the project if there is no connection with the theme or writing style, or for any other reason. I am sure you will hear from other authors as to their whys.

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  • Barry Vass

    Barry

    Barry Vass

    novelist at Whiskey Creek Press

    Yeah, Skip, I think I’m with Mirta here. Writers write, and whether it’s for their own satisfaction or to get paid or critiqued, we still do what we choose to do. Most of us can’t get away from that. I normally go online to see how my books are doing, and then widen my search to other areas. Smashwords recently posted the first 27 pages of my fourth novel, Portals, via its website, and I was interested to see how this would affect sales. And my second novel, Free Money, was recently classified as a collector’s item, and paperback copies of this novel that originally sold for $19.95 are now going for $471 on Amazon. Speaking for myself, it’s nice to see what other writers are doing. You write for yourself first of all, and any contacts you make are just an added bonus.

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  • Christina Hamlett

    Christina

    Christina Hamlett

    2013 Advisory Expert – Writing and Publishing at National Association of Women on the Rise

    As for me, I’m always looking for authors I can put in the spotlight at You Read It Here First (http://fromtheauthors.wordpress.com/). Given the fact that the downsizing at today’s publishing houses largely leaves authors to fend for themselves in promotion, I applaud any creative efforts such as the one launched by Heather that can increase networking opportunities and enable writers to help one another. It’s fun to see what fellow authors are up to and if anyone who has posted here would like to be my next feature interviewee, the door is always open to hear from them.

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  • Lachelle Smith

    Lachelle

    Lachelle Smith

    Scrapbooking Services & Writer

    Title: TBD. Main Character: Shelley. Novel about a divorcée’s journey. 
    Sneak Peak: 
    “Could I actually kill him?” She quietly wondered. She wished him dead, fantasized about him being out of her life forever. But could she actually kill him herself. The physical act of committing murder was a thing very different than just fantasizing about the after math. None of her friends or family would blame her. They’d be surprised she was actually capable of such a thing but they would not blame her for killing the son of a bitch. Every one of them had thought about it. 
    She couldn’t help dreaming about it: his murder. He just kept doing things to piss her off. Why did he have to do that?

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  • Dave

    Dave Kenagy

    Dean Emeritus at Willamette University College of Law, Freelance Writer

    Title: “Six Words that Killed the Gospel” 
    Sub-title: “Rediscovering the God of Gladness” 

    Introduction: Killer words. 
    Is your butt in the pew and your brain out the door? Are you drifting away from church? From God? Do other things in your weekend look better than going to church? Does anything look better? If you’ve answered “yes” . . . you are not alone. 
    But if you’re bothered by the ditch running between your Sunday morning church service and everything else you do, that’s great. It means you’re ready to defer your trip toward the Exit sign long enough to think about it. And if you’ll alter your travel plans just a little, you’ll discover that the “Good News” Christians yak about is still very good news. Sadly, however, a body bag of words now holds that news. 
    What words, exactly, comprise this zippered death shroud? No, not “sex, drugs and rock and roll”. Try again. Here’s your hint: The killer words are found among the very words used by well-intentioned preachers on any Sunday morning in America.

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  • Bonnie N.

    Bonnie

    Bonnie N.

    CEO of Newcomer Consulting

    Thank you Mirta, for the answer to my question. It makes sense now that you took the time to explain. Could it possibly be any clearer that I am a neophyte? Thank you again, for your gracious reply. 
    Bonnie

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  • David Lugsden

    David

    David Lugsden

    Teacher of Art

    Almost fourteen years had passed since the Millars took Gabriel home from the hospital and how their lives had changed since that day. Despite repeated tests, doctors and orthopaedists alike had failed to diagnose Gabriel’s condition and deduce its cause. True to his word, four months after being released from the hospital Doctor Warner had re-admitted baby Gabriel for surgery and his wings were clipped, so to speak. Despite their lack of understanding of the condition, his surgeons had successfully removed both bone growths and after several more months of monitoring his progress, had finally fully discharged him from their care. All that now remained were two small, identical scars across each of his shoulder blades. 

    Child of the Gryphon: Genesis, the first of a series of six novels. 

    Gabriel Millar discovers that everything about his life is a lie, including his genetics; not all men evolved from apes and the most terrifying of these new races is the very reason his life has been fraught with danger since birth.

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  • K.J. Rabane

    K.J.

    K.J. Rabane

    Independent Entertainment Professional

    Who Is Sarah Lawson? Main character Rowena Shaw. 
    It was Thursday. I remember catching the bus to work, having lunch sitting in the park and at five catching the bus back home in the rush hour traffic. I’ve gone over it again and again, not only to the police but also to myself and my version of the day’s events doesn’t change. 
    I walked down the lane from the bus stop. Next door’s cat wrapped itself around my ankles and an ambulance siren wailed in the distance. When I put my key in the lock I had no premonition of what I was to find.

     Mirta O.Christina Hamlett like this

  • Maria McCutchen

    Maria

    Maria McCutchen

    Freelance Writer and Author

    “It’s all in Your Head,” my memoir, tells the story of what I went through after I was diagnosed with a rare brain condition called a Posterior Fossa Arachnoid Cyst. When doctors don’t listen to their patients – horrific things can happen. 

    “October 2004 Like any stay-at-home mother of young children will tell you, life is very busy. There is never a good time for a mother to get sick; not even with a cold. So in 2004, with a three year old son, and a six year old son, to be told that I had a rare brain disorder, was nothing less than devastating. How will I fit that into my schedule? I wondered. 
    It snuck up on me so slowly; clever and cunning, that I wasn’t even sure there was anything really wrong with me. Maybe it’s just stress, I thought. Maybe I’m over tired or I’m imagining things. But when a trip to the grocery store, where I’d shopped a thousand times before, left me in a sheer panic because I couldn’t find the dairy section, I knew that it had to be more than stress.”

     Mirta O.Bonnie N. like this

  • Jan Mulligan

    Jan

    Jan Mulligan

    Author, “Smuggler’s Legacy,” and “A Square of Apples.”

    Hi, Skip,

    Yours is an important question, worth contemplation, relating to how writers invest their time. I look upon these LinkedIn groups as another facet of our contemporary SEO marketplace. It expands my writing group; always a good thing – I learn something new from my fellow authors every time.

    And there’s always a chance that we might contribute to a fellow writer’s progress.

    Best wishes,
    Jan Mulligan
    Author, “A Square of Apples”

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Marie–That’s an awesome concept for a book. Great first 100! 
    Jennifer–Good beginning. 
    Viktoria–very intriguing. 
    Maria–Oh yeah! got my attention. 
    K.J.–Great hook. 
    David–Awesome! 
    Dave–the first question alone got my attention. Good start. 
    Lachelle–been there. Good start. BTW, I love your first name. 
    Mirta–very interesting start. 
    E. Van–good descriptive start. 
    Jan–Whoa! Got my attention! 
    Viorica–touched my heart. It reminded me of my ex-husband who was sent to military school, at age 5. 
    Bill–gave me the sense of desolation. 
    Gemma–good start, great hook. 
    Karl–Good analogy. Makes sense. Also, “Cab Driver” is anoher good start. You immediately personified cab drivers. 
    Peggy–excellent start. I immediately pictured the scene. 
    Amos–your descriptions create a picture. Good. 
    Christina–good start. Capured my attention.

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  • Jennifer Davies

    Jennifer

    Jennifer Davies

    Writer

    have to share this with you because I read an earlier comment about the point of this conversation and I did wonder at the beginning. However, after dismissing my prologue( first 100 words) I have fallen in love with my beginning again and have decided to keep it. I’m sure, if it hadn’t have been for this group, it would’ve been lost. Thank you. Sometimes, you need to stand back and let others take a look.Thank you. 

    My Book is called, Children of Annwn: The Promise 
    It’s a YA romantic fantasy. 
    My first 100 words …. 

    Mia knew that many mysterious things happened when the darkness consumed the light, it had always been so. She stared out across the endless glossy water and her hair danced wildly as the fury of the wind whipped against her. She captured Ryder’s hand and sunk her feet into the silky grains of white sand, her toes curled in the cold waters of the great sea. With her feet firmly planted and her back as rigid as an iron rod, nothing could move her. Not the howling wind or the coming storm, her mind was set

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  • Mirta Oliva

    Mirta

    Mirta Oliva

    Author, Visual artist, Illustrator

    Carol Spalino, you’ve started something that highlights Heather Marie’s great Discussion. You cared enough to opine on authors’ First 100 Words. I do appreciate your comment! 
    From an author’s standpoint, the beginning of a story at some point will blend with the overall theme or circumstances but, in and by itself, will not reveal the plot or plots that await the reader. In that regard, some authors have left out the “one sentence summary.” To the extent that the first one hundred words may not tell what the story is all about, the brief summary may provide a clue to what those words will lead to. Just a thought…

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Mirta–I agree. Or the first 100 should be intriguing enough for a reader to want to know more. 

    I believe in encouragement. This is why I find something good to say about each entry.

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  • Mirta Oliva

    Mirta

    Mirta Oliva

    Author, Visual artist, Illustrator

    Bonnie N. Yes, when we are newcomers to the many groups, we want to quickly absorb the rules of the game and determine how we can better interact, so we miss the obvious. It happened to me too.

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  • Gene Hilgreen

    Gene

    Gene Hilgreen

    Suspense/Thriller Novelist at BAD Day Publishing

    I get it. I didn’t have it four days ago. My mentor Dr. Lyn is wise, and so is Heather. If your first hundred words, doesn’t show something happening. You lost the reader. I had to go a lot more then a hundred. Back story might be interesting to me, but I may have lost you. You are wise, Heather.

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  • Robert

    Robert F.

     

    David 

    Wonderful writing, but, I might rid it of the phrase, ‘so it seems’. I was told it’s a weak phrase–it is or isn’t… I was chastised for the same thing…

  • Robert

    Robert F.

     

    Thank you, Gene! Spot on–now, finding the ‘hook’..

  • Moitrayee Bhaduri

    Moitrayee

    Moitrayee Bhaduri

    Manager at IBM India – Content

    Thank you all for your likes and comments on my Story Synopsis. This is really encouraging! Also, am appalled to see the number of talented writers we have! I read about 25 of the story summaries so far and LOVED them! Each is original in its own way. Wish each one of you good luck in your journey. Cheers!

     Dave K.Jennifer Davies and 3 others like this

  • Marty Sturino

    Marty

    Marty Sturino

    Business Consultant and Publisher – Author of “The Autogrill Murder” and “Letters from Calabria”

    Appalled? Not delighted or impressed? Or, are you saying that you are appalled, because so few show talent? I suspect not. Appalled/enthralled.. close opposites.. Sometimes we all pull the wrong “word” out of the hat. I’m famous for it myself. None-the-less, we get your point from the positive tone you set. Thank You, from everyone for your kind words of encouragement and please forgive me for my nit-picking.

     Mirta O.Carole Spalino and 1 other like this

  • David Lugsden

    David

    David Lugsden

    Teacher of Art

    Thanks for the support and advice, Robert, and for the support from others as well! To be honest I was beginning to become a little bit disheartened with the lack of success I have thus far experienced. Your support is very encouraging indeed!

     Robert F.Mirta O. like this

  • Moitrayee Bhaduri

    Moitrayee

    Moitrayee Bhaduri

    Manager at IBM India – Content

    Thanks so much Marty Sturino! I wanted to say ‘shocked’ without the ‘dismay’ attached to it. I realize now that ‘appalled’ was not the right word to use :p. Thanks for pointing it out. This discussion has been a great learning experience. So please keep sharing your feedback. It helps loads. Thank you :)

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  • Robert

    Robert F.

     

    Hi David, 
    Very seriously, this endevor can be very disheartening. 
    What we are trying to do is hard. 
    We eachhave a different goal by opening a vein all over the page (graphic, I know, but, at 4:30 a.m. on the East Coast of the U.S., that’s the image that came to mind) of the process of writing. It’s tough, painful, but, for reasons not understood by many–vitally important. 
    In my perfect world, I would be content to write for the sake of writing–that’s it; never caring about being published, what others think–none of it, but, as I invest time, it takes on an increasing importance in my life–if nothing else, I have invested much time and energy. 
    I don’t care for the idea that we need to get published to somehow make our literary work legitimate–maybe that’s my hang-up, but, it’s my feeling. 
    If that is the case, then in this insanely competitive writing field, it is so important to have every bit of positive support we can find, and, to me, THAT is one reason this forum is so important. 
    If I’ve made grammerical or, punctuation mistakes, please forgive me. 
    It is 4:30 in the morning and communicating with those of us, who swim against the tide around the globe writing and helping each other is a remarkable and wonderful thing.

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  • Damon

    Damon Chagollan

    ESI Automation Administrator

    For me writing never felt like a choice but a calling. The voice had to come out, had to put on pages. The formulation of stories was the only challenge. I am working on two books (really only 1 at the moment as the other is waiting until i can isolate myself for a month to finish it) and haven’t even tackled the trying to get published part. If i worried so much about that i would probably get discouraged enough to not finish these projects. For now it is enough motivation to finish it for myself and those important people in my life (who btw keep asking me when they can read it).

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  • Barry Vass

    Barry

    Barry Vass

    novelist at Whiskey Creek Press

    Thanks for sharing, Robert. When I first started writing and began getting rejection notices, whenever I showed them to my mother, she would always say some variation of “Why do you always have to do the hardest thing possible?” And that’s probably true: writing and being accepted for your writing is the hardest thing possible. People who don’t write probably wouldn’t understand this, but there’s something incredibly satisfying about seeing your work finally get into print. It’s validation. So hang in there, because a great many others have been where you are!

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  • Philip Mann

    Philip

    Philip Mann

    Author at large

    Vi felt good in his arms- secure , loved, wanted. And especially desired .Everything the way it was supposed to be. The evening had been perfect- a comedy club, dinner at a cozy restaurant , the kind he always seemed to find . Now, music and dancing at his flat overlooking the St. Lawrence River.The window was open, letting the cool mid-summer breeze waft in . Perhaps it would go well after all . 

    Vi knew what to expect , yet hoped it would turn out well after all .She was wearing a lightweight leather jacket and short cocktail dress. Around her waist was a gold chain he had given her . Cal liked it , she knew that . 
    ******************************************************************************************** 

    The book is titled Dark Muse. The premise is dangerous love. The central character has some unnatural condition that makes intimacy- not necessarily sex- very dangerous for a partner. What would you do in her position ? What would a partner- cal , in this case- do when he finds out ?

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  • Sarah Cain

    Sarah

    Sarah Cain

    Writer at Venture Analysis Inc.

    On Apr 28, 2013, at 5:43 PM, Writers <groups-noreply@linkedin.com

  • Robert

    Robert F.

     

    If this gets to you (I pressed ‘Reply’ because my ‘ Comments’ button 
    didn’t work.

    I like your story. A good lustful piece, with, I bet, a bit of mystery 
    and, maybe, morality thrown in later.

    Anyway, great! You mention the St. Lawrence River. Any chance it takes 
    place in Montreal?

    ..

  • Bonnie N.

    Bonnie

    Bonnie N.

    CEO of Newcomer Consulting

    Main Character: Juliette, is in the process of redecorating her apartment. She is ruminating about the work she has done and what still needs to be completed. 
    Working Title: We are Juliette 

    Sometimes I contentedly wallow in the jumble of artfully mismatched sheets & pillows with a silky comforter thrown on top. My bed a mattress on the floor, surrounded by piles of books, magazines, one small light, and an obstacle course of unopened boxes. My TV and computer were hooked up, my phone close by, and there was plenty to eat & read. 

    The confusion and disarray was calming; it allowed my brain to stop searching, searching, searching… for that picture hung 1/4″ too high; that remote on the table that needed to be turned just a touch to the left; the throw rug with a tiny tuft of soft blond dog hair nagging to be disposed of.

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  • Mirta Oliva

    Mirta

    Mirta Oliva

    Author, Visual artist, Illustrator

    “It all started when one recent summer day I remembered the origami 
    figures I used to make as a child and later on as an adult: the paper boat 
    was easy, who hasn’t made an origami boat? Easy as well were the box, 
    hat and other objects. My true desire, though, was to make a paper bird 
    but this project turned out to be a little bit more difficult… 
    After a few trials and errors, a typical paper bird was created but that 
    was not enough to satisfy what had been lurking in my mind. Somehow, 
    I had envisioned a colorful, playful paper bird…” 

    Children’s Book BIRDYJOSH anD BIRDYLU ~ A Paper Birds’ Story. 

    –An endearing story about a family of Origami-style paper birds and their struggles to survive amidst an unknown environment.The artwork follows the chicks’ path through a beautiful, guarded existence.

     Robert F.Bonnie N. and 1 other like this

  • Bonnie N.

    Bonnie

    Bonnie N.

    CEO of Newcomer Consulting

    Mirta, 
    your BirdyJosh and Birdylu story sounds delightful and so original! Has it been published?

  • Robert

    Robert F.

     

    My story’s name is:’Going Under’ What do you think it’s about? Just curious.

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  • Mirta Oliva

    Mirta

    Mirta Oliva

    Author, Visual artist, Illustrator

    Thank you, Bonnie for your nice comments. Yes, it is available with free preview. I had started a few random paintings of origami-style paper birds (artistic license used in their design) when I realized that they – unwittingly – told a story, so the writing began. Being my first book, I spent a great deal of time in the publication process rather than on the book itself. The HIGH paper-back price cannot be lowered (if I had known it at the outset…) so I also published it later as an eBook as well. If I had to do it again, I would never have agreed to tie the book first to a publisher ($) before the work had been finished (Chapter numbers; About the author; Preface, etc. should better conform to industry standards); however, I hope the illustrations and sweet narrative make up for it. My second book, a novel, is an eBook – published free. Working on other projects, I have not been actively marketing either book.

  • Shawna Hill, MCM

    Shawna

    Shawna Hill, MCM

    Indigo Designs Group – Advertising/Marketer

    Dragging her sore and badly broken up body from the driver’s seat, Naomi Saunders walked the dimly lit highway and headed back toward the city lights. She limped in pain, but had maintained her stride down the road. Every time a car approached, she tried to walk strong and appear as if nothing was wrong. The last thing she wanted was for someone to stop and offer help…especially the police. 

    This is from my book, Intimate Illusions, the 2nd in my series. The main character is Naomi Saunders. The book in the series is about a woman that is set and determined to start her a new life but is drawn back into the world by a she wanted to leave behind but couldn’t resist the chance to get even with him when the opportunity arrives.

     Michelle LommenMirta O. like this

  • Shawna Hill, MCM

    Shawna

    Shawna Hill, MCM

    Indigo Designs Group – Advertising/Marketer

    He wrapped his arms tightly around her waist and brought her even closer than she’d imagined he would. Was he no longer mad? She wondered. Had he finally accepted that she was the mother of his child? His lips lightly caressed her neck. Falling into him even more, she sighed softly then inhaled and closed her eyes. 
    “I wanted so badly to be there with you when you had our son”, Kevin whispered in her ear, his voice like smooth silk. His breath, hot and arousing, brushed her ear then his mouth and tongue moved down her throat. 

    This is from The Ladies Club, the 3rd installment of my “Naomi” series. Main character is again Naomi. This book follows Naomi into the world of a Madam, that intertwines with her past, bringing devastation to all involved. Naomi is back up to her old tricks but this time, it may backfire.

     Michelle Lommen likes this

  • K.S. Butler

    K.S.

    K.S. Butler

    Author

    There were, in the deep regions of space, pathways to dimensional pockets, hidden to all but those who knew the great highways of existence. These were the gateways between worlds connecting the vast unyielding cosmos. In this specific pocket, in this particular quadrant, at this precise moment, there came a quiver. It was the tiniest quake that suddenly rippled, and then slowly burst open, depositing into this space and time, Dez Daityäas, Imperial Assassin of the Ruling House of Deamos. The journey from her homeland had been a blur to her eyes, a twisting, turning roller-coaster that played havoc on her stomach. 

    “9World Chronicles” – The Gods of legend have returned..to complete their conquest of Earth. 
    Main Character : Elijah “Falcon” Rohn.

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  • Alene Geed

    Alene

    Alene Geed

    Jewelry Designer, Sales Professional and Author

    Very nice, K.S. You have quite a gift with words. Will look for the book, too

     K.S. B. likes this

  • Adda Leah (Addie) Davis

    Adda Leah (Addie)

    Adda Leah (Addie) Davis

    Author/Owner at Golden Harvest Creations

    The Tangled Webs We Weave 
    Bill Hardin would be alive today if his wife, Hannah, hadn’t pressured him to move east to Beckley,West Virginia. Hannah’s love of place begun a web that dramatically changed the lives of all those caught in its tendrils. 
    Hannah and Bill had spent their married life in Sheldon, Washington, a nice little town between Port Angeles and Seattle where they both worked. Most of the work in the area was related to the timber industry, but at least they both had jobs.Bill, however, was very dissatisfied with his foreman position with Plum Creek Timber Company. “A man with a degree in Accounting and Management shouldn’t have to get out and do manual labor when workers don’t show up,” he often complained.

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  • Robert

    Robert F.

     

    It reminds me of the way I write! Almost a stream of words. 
    Eventually, I went back and went through every sentence to make sure it does exactly what I need it to do. People seem to be responding better to my stuff, but, yours is excellent–just reminds me. of me. 

    Keep up the good work!

     Mirta O. likes this

  • Adda Leah (Addie) Davis

    Adda Leah (Addie)

    Adda Leah (Addie) Davis

    Author/Owner at Golden Harvest Creations

    Reading the many comments is like visiting a candy store as a child and trying to decide which I like best. I’m so honored to be a part of such talented writers.

     Mirta O.Robert F. and 2 others like this

  • Robert

    Robert F.

     

    It sure is! 
    The wealth of imagination is awe inspiring…

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  • Len Robertson

    Len

    Len Robertson

    Independent Writing and Editing Professional

    This is the first 100 words to my novel, Revelations, that will be published on Smashwords in May.

    It’s 2046, twenty years after the gigantic Aquarian Empire has quarantined Earth, the world has divided into two warring camps The neo Darwinians and the People of the Book, and Jennifer Strand’s father Oscar was martyred for writing his Destiny Hypothesis that man’s destiny was the stars.

    There are two main characters, Jennifer Strand and Boone Dalton, an injured ex-race driver.

    October 2046
    Ius Chasma, Mars

    The wall screen in Jennifer Strand’s lab brightened as she entered the room. A message in large block letters spread across the screen. “Jennifer,” it read, “I think you need to see this.” 

    See what, Jennifer wondered? “Ulysses,” she commanded. “Display any attachments.”
    Nothing. “Ulysses, display attachments.”

    The screen remained blank.

    Another message spread across the screen. “Password. The scientist that’s your mother’s namesake.”

    What? Oh. “Marie Curie.”

    The screen continued blank.

    The message had to have come from Boone Dalton, Jennifer groused to herself. The man could be so old-fashioned at times. “Ulysses. On-screen keyboard.”

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  • Philip Mann

    Philip

    Philip Mann

    Author at large

    Howie rounded the last corner home at a sprint . At six foot two and just over one-eighty , he was a star college hockey player. But , too many injuries stopped that career , and law practice paid pretty well . 

    He stopped just before his home and braced his hands on his knees. Nothing left to give. 

    ` Not bad, Howie ! Not bad at all ! ` It was Marlene , his blonde neighbour. she had a figure that could cause traffic accidents ,and in her two piece Lycra outfit , she was well displayed . 

    ` Oh , hi Marlene . Yeah , well , hit the big four -oh , and things change. Just trying to keep in shape . `scuse me while I catch my breath .` 

    ` Can`t see an inch of fat on that bod of yours, Howie. My my.` And she circled him as he stood there . 

    ****************************************************************************************** 

    The title is `Form of Darkness, Form of Light, and it concerns faith , belonging, and rebelling. Also, careful who you talk to. Think Fiddler on the Roof meets Fatal Attraction

  • Mariushka Ostrowski

    Mariushka

    Mariushka Ostrowski

    B2B & B2C commerce, Marketing Analysis, Product integration, Event Organizer, PR Professional

    Len Robertson, I would love to hear more of your story

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  • Len Robertson

    Len

    Len Robertson

    Independent Writing and Editing Professional

    It will be published this month by Smashwords. It might seem early to put it on the sige but Smashwords says one can’t start too soon to advertise.

     Mariushka OstrowskiMirta O. and 1 other like this

  • Mariushka Ostrowski

    Mariushka

    Mariushka Ostrowski

    B2B & B2C commerce, Marketing Analysis, Product integration, Event Organizer, PR Professional

    Very wise of Smashwords to say so. Looking forward to read the whole book, Len
    Best of luck

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Philip–I think starting with dialogue in the first 100 grabs a reader’s attention right out of the gate. Good start. 
    Len–I want to see the screen. Instant intrigue. 
    Adda–Of course I want to know why Bill Hardin isn’t alive today. Good start.

     Adda Leah (Addie) DavisMirta O. like this

  • Len Robertson

    Len

    Len Robertson

    Independent Writing and Editing Professional

    Questing For Dragons. 
    published 4/13 
    Available at Smashwords and e-book outlets 

    The main character is Pen. The richest man in Pen’s village wants her for his wife, an evil baron wants her in his bed, his witch wife wants her dead, the emperor offers a huge ransom capture the reborn Roxanne, and, worst of all, she’s disguised herself as a boy to squire a formidable yet wooden headed knight who’s seeking the Dragon Lord. 

    Blame it on Igor 

    For most of her life, Penelope had been thin and bony with an odd frog-like voice that made her an object of ridicule in her village. All those years, she prayed nightly to be someone else. Then, like magic, she did change, and with that change she learned the ugly truth about heartfelt wishes. They can be treacherous. 

    Like today. Without warning her life was in frightful jeopardy. “I don’t want to marry Igor,” she shouted at her father. “He’s an old man and he’s weak.”

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Len–I may have already mentioned this, but your beginning drew my interest immediately.

  • Ronald Ragan

    Ronald

    Ronald Ragan

    Writer Author

    This is the first 100 words of First Kiss: Missing – Oct 16, 2012 – Amazon.com 

    Present day Los Angeles – 
    This is not how I pictured my day going. When I woke up this morning, I did not think I would end up lying in the street, covered in blood. I am not even sure it’s my blood. I’m cold and it’s raining. This most likely ruining my suit. 
    With every drop of rain that runs down my body, it brings more blood with it. When I turn my head, I can see the men who were in the crash. One of them I didn’t bother pulling out. The other died right after I got him to the ground.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Ronald–Great beginning. Pulls a reader right in.

  • Barry Vass

    Barry

    Barry Vass

    novelist at Whiskey Creek Press

    Here’s the first little bit from my fifth novel, scheduled to be released this winter by Whiskey Creek Press, about two New Orleans homicide detectives trying to solve a bizarre series of murders before and during Mardi Gras. 

    Johnny Bautista didn’t like it. Something was wrong; something didn’t make sense… 
    Truth be told, being thirty-nine years old and having been a member of the New Orleans Police Department for almost eighteen years, there wasn’t a hell of a lot that Johnny did like. He was partial to vacation time, or maybe a good home-cooked meal. People kept telling him he was turning into a grump before his time, much like his father. It bothered him, but he didn’t really dwell on it. His work kept him too busy for that.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Barry–curiosity is killing me! I want to know what is not right! Great hook.

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  • Barry Vass

    Barry

    Barry Vass

    novelist at Whiskey Creek Press

    And that’s a good thing, right Carole? I always try to get a hook into the first paragraph, and then develop as much more as I can into the first chapter. Getting and keeping the reader’s interest is the most important thing when you’re writing a novel.

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    That’s a VERY good thing, Barry.

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  • Ronald Ragan

    Ronald

    Ronald Ragan

    Writer Author

    Thank you Carole, I never realized how few 100 words were, until now.

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  • K. B. Schaller

    K. B.

    K. B. Schaller

    Columnist, Illustrator and Features writer at Indian Life newspaper

    From first chapter of Gray Rainbow Journey, “a unique coming-of-age novel about the stunning consequences of choices, presented from a Native American viewpoint”. 

    “Cheha sat on her screen porch enjoying the sunlit morning as she worked at her bead loom. The annual Powwow and Indian Crafts Show was not very far off, and her beadwork always brought a tidy sum. Suddenly the soft brightness disappeared. In its place, a gigantic shadow oozed across the small patch of ground that was her front yard. 

    “Startled, Cheha looked up. The great winged creature was straight out of the nightmare world. Its menacing eyes petrified her, held her spellbound; and he was soaring straight toward her… ” 

    My hands shook as I sat there holding the journal at the small table in my mother’s breakfast nook. I strained to see in the fading light. I dreaded what more these pages would reveal, yet my curiosity was overpowering. 

    Camera character: Dina Youngblood. 

    Synopsis: Cheha Youngblood disappeared without a trace from the BItterroot Confederacy of Indians three months ago. All that is left are a series of journals in which she speaks of herself in the 3rd person. 

    Dina, the older of her two daughters, who has discovered the journals, wonders: What do the clues mean? Who is the giant-winged creature that so terrified her, a Native Christian convert? Could any of the tales that are as old as the Indfian nations, told in the blackness of deep nights in the Everglades be true?… 

    Then handsome Marty Osceola, the son of the most powerful witch on the Florida East Coast–the boy Dina had a crush on in grade school–arrives back in town…

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  • Jan Deelstra

    Jan

    Jan Deelstra

    Writer & Consultant

    That 100 word thing sure brings out the inner critic…err, I mean, editor. Just sayin.’

  • Laura A. H. Elliott

    Laura A. H.

    Laura A. H. Elliott

    Author of young adult and middle grade fiction

    My road blood ripened the day I got wise to love. No one walks Highway 33 but there I was on that godforsaken two-lane road. There was nothing but quail calls, my wind-whipped hair and my twitchy feet. Wedding jitters, Doctor Hernandez had said. But that walk was different than any other. Every flip-flop step asked a question. 
    Why tonight? Not our wedding night? What if I’m no good? What if I’m worse than the other girls? Did all that matter anymore? 
    I didn’t have any answers. 

    Winnemucca, a small-town fairy tale [literary, magical realism, romance] 
    Virginia Mae Nolyan is the main character 
    A teenage girl awakens to her intuition on an enchanted road trip where fear’s as blind as love.

     Diane ElliottPaula Friedman and 3 others like this

  • Paula Friedman

    Paula

    Paula Friedman

    Novelist–debut antiwar novel (2012)

    Excellently written, Laura! Same for some others of your samples, people! Super!

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  • Laura A. H. Elliott

    Laura A. H.

    Laura A. H. Elliott

    Author of young adult and middle grade fiction

    Thanks for your kind words Paula :)

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Laura–very interesting beginning.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    I just published “Consequences.” This is the last in the “Choices” series. First there were choices and choices always lead to consequences. These are the first 100 or so. 

    Loraine Carter frowned at the late hour when she heard the doorbell. Who would be visiting at this time of night? It was almost nine-thirty and dark outside. She flipped the switch for the outside light and peered out through the peephole. The auburn-haired woman standing on the stoop of Loraine’s suburban ranch home did not look familiar, nor did she look dangerous. Curiosity overtook caution as Loraine pulled the door open. 
    “Yes?” Loraine’s greeting was curt as she eyed the woman warily. 
    Although she was reasonably attractive, it was easy to see that she must have been through some rough times. Loraine sensed what was close to desperation in this green-eyed woman with faded auburn hair, and pale skin.

     Barry V.Mirta O. and 2 others like this

  • Barry Vass

    Barry

    Barry Vass

    novelist at Whiskey Creek Press

    Laura, Nevada writers are few and far between. I see you are now living in Salinas, but are you writing about Winnemucca from first-hand experience?

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  • Laura A. H. Elliott

    Laura A. H.

    Laura A. H. Elliott

    Author of young adult and middle grade fiction

    Thanks for your kind words Carole. I’m interested to learn more about this auburn beauty with a past! Barry….yes I am. I love the rich history of Winnemucca as a crossroads to the West. And, on a road trip to Mt. Rushmore from CA with one of my daughters we made a point of stopping and overnighting in Winnemucca. It is the Emerald City of the novel. What I love most about the city is that when I’m at book events, people who know the town share with me their stories of their experiences there. It’s one of the things I love the most about talking with readers who’ve enjoyed Ginny’s story. Thanks for asking! Do you have any Winnemucca stories?

     Raj ChawlaMirta O. like this

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Laura–Unfortunately, I do not.

     Laura A. H. ElliottMirta O. like this

  • Michèle Porretta

    Michèle

    Michèle Porretta

    Auteur – Editeur de livres électroniques en français and Author – Editor of ebooks

    Here is the beginning of a friend of mine’s story : Lila Sunshine written by Léa Nil, this is a sentimental roman with a touch of erotism : 

    One evening in November, Lila entered Rita’s grocery, which was on the ground floor of the Parisian apartment where she lived. She put her shopping in the cart she had fetched and went to the till. Rita, as she passed items, asked her if she would like to do babysitting. 
    She loved Lila because she was a serious girl and she wanted to help her out of her difficult family environment. A little extra work would be beneficial to help her to get away from the tyranny of her stepmother. 
    Lila was thrilled, she accepted the proposal, although she had no experience in this field. …

     Raj ChawlaMirta O. and 2 others like this

  • E.VAn Johnson

    E.VAn

    E.VAn Johnson

    Lecturer/Creative writing/ Author/ Journalist

    The opening to my latest book ‘Lost to the sea.’ The first in a series of sea styories set n the 1750’s following the life of Jamie Johnson, orphaned at 12 and sent to sea. 

    The boy was in his element, he could hardly contain his excitement as the small coble danced over the waves like a lively young colt kicking her heels. The heavy canvas lug sail stood hard as iron in the stiff breeze. The old man felt the tiller kick like a living thing as the sea rose up astern. Gently he eased the head of the boat to leeward skilfully counteracting the press of canvas trying to force the boat’s head up into the wind. 
    “Here Jamie lad,” he called, “take the tiller.” His voice was deep and strong and carried easily against the rush of the wind and the crash of the sea against the stout wooden hull.

     Susannah MacDonaldMirta O. and 5 others like this

  • Susannah MacDonald

    Susannah

    Susannah MacDonald

    Freelance artist, illustrator & teacher.

    @E.van – oh I love stories about the sea! You have set the scene so that I can almost smell the salt in the air and feel the wood of the hull against my back!

  • E.VAn Johnson

    E.VAn

    E.VAn Johnson

    Lecturer/Creative writing/ Author/ Journalist

    Many thanks Susannah. I was a fisherman, a naval officer a proffesional yachtsman and commercial diver so I was either in it on it or under it for most of my life.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    E.Van Johnson–Good descriptive adjectives. 
    Michele–I have a question: Was it the cart Lila fetched or the shopping items? Good start.

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  • Michèle Porretta

    Michèle

    Michèle Porretta

    Auteur – Editeur de livres électroniques en français and Author – Editor of ebooks

    Carole, I love the extract of Consequences. This asks me what happen after, I’m going to look for Consequences . Don’t know if this is your first book, don’t think so. Michèle from France

  • E.VAn Johnson

    E.VAn

    E.VAn Johnson

    Lecturer/Creative writing/ Author/ Journalist

    This is the opening of my Autobiography. This is a first draft so please pull it to pieces if you wish.

    Small Beginning. 

    December 1940 was hardly the best time to be born, the Second World War at its height, rationing was in force and the threat of invasion was very real. To avoid the bombing my family moved from Flood Street, Chelsea to the North East coast of England 14 miles from Newcastle. 
    I was born the youngest of six children and we lived in a small terraced house in Oxford Street Whitley Bay. Unusually I was baptised twice, once as Evan Johnson in the local Methodist Church and the second time as Evangelos Iannous in the Greek Orthodox Church because my mother was English but my Father was Greek. 
    Why do people give their children such awful names? I hated both and got into countless fights over them. Evangelos was just too much of a mouthful for the raggy arsed kids in I mixed with; they would insist on calling me Evan as the Welsh would pronounce it, whereas in Greek the E is emphasized as in even, so my early school days were fraught with teasing and fights

     K. B. SchallerMichèle Porretta and 1 other like this

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Thank you, Michele. This is the final book in a series. The first one was “Choices” then there were two more after that. “The Bushes are Red” and “The Full Nelson” but all choices lead to “Consequences” with ties up all the loose ends and makes everything fit in harmony.

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    E.Van–That’s an excellent beginning for your autobiography.

  • E.VAn Johnson

    E.VAn

    E.VAn Johnson

    Lecturer/Creative writing/ Author/ Journalist

    Thank you Carole, when youn nreach 70 the clock is ticking so I have to get all this writing out of my system.

  • Anne Green BA Dip DI Dip NLP Dip LC MIMTD

    Anne

    Anne Green BA Dip DI Dip NLP Dip LC MIMTD

    Owner, AI Solutions and Central DT

    Is coaching the greatest phenomenon of the 21st Century or was Socrates right all along, we have as with many things tried to move on from something that did not need to be changed. There were many great philosophers, geniuses, mathematicians and scholars, and over the first few hundred years A.D. many of us have learned from them.

    One of the biggest life changes was for all to have an education, so why was this not something that had been available to all in the past. Learning scriptures, preaching, describing practical tasks for workers was just part of the use of language, as time went on

    Taken from Coaching a Move Forwards, due for publication later this year. I notice the majority, I confess to not reading all, of the above snippets are fiction, my book is not a novel.

     Romesh ChopraMichelle Lommen like this

  • Philip Mann

    Philip

    Philip Mann

    Author at large

    Very thought provoking, very interesting . Note taken to get hold of this book .

     Michelle LommenAli H. like this

  • E.VAn Johnson

    E.VAn

    E.VAn Johnson

    Lecturer/Creative writing/ Author/ Journalist

    The opening to my first novel Dead Men Make the Best Heroes. This is part of the incident which brings the main character into the story anf changee his life forever. 

    Chapter 1 

    London March 1973. 

    Hyde Park was cold. Low scudding clouds held the threat of rain and a chill wind whipped the Serpentine into small wavelets. Ducks and geese bobbed about as they squabbled for scraps of stale bread thrown by a small child. A young Nanny held the child’s collar to prevent her falling in as she laughed and squealed at the antics of the birds. 
    A short distance away, a City Gent sat perusing his Times crossword. The paper was neatly folded in the manner that only a seasoned commuter ever achieves. He wore a black topcoat, the Astrakhan collar turned up against the wind. The man smiled to himself as he glanced at the scene. 
    All too soon the bread was gone and the birds scattered as the Nanny gently pulled the reluctant child away. The man nodded as they passed. 
    “A charming child.” he said. 
    “Thank you.” the Nanny replied. “Mind you, she can be a bit of a handful when she wants to be.” 
    The man rose, neatly folding his paper. 
    He inclined his head to the Nanny and ruffled the child’s fair hair. “Good-bye young lady,” he said, “thank you for making my morning such a pleasant one.” With that he turned and walked off briskly towards Hyde Park Corner. At the end of the lake, the path divided. 
    He paused, dropped his paper into a waste bin and walked briskly on without a backward glance.

     Ali H.Mirta O. and 3 others like this

  • Ali

    Ali happyali105@yahoo.com

    selfworker chez omar abia

    Assalam Alaikum 

    I m verry happy to hear from you ,and nice meeting you, 

    I m Ali Kharraz man, 37 years old, Ilive in Agadir Morocco, I m Pranist 

    if you have other business to explore in morocco too, you are wellcome 
    if you want to suggest to you, i will do it, 

    Ali Kharraz 
    Bloc4N105Cite Sidi Mohamed ‘ihchach’ 
    Agadir-80.000 
    Morocco

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    E.Van–The clock ticks for all of us. I’m not too many years behind you–well, 4 to be exact–and there is still so much I want to accomplish.

     Mirta O.Jennifer Davies like this

  • Jeffrey Winters

    Jeffrey

    Jeffrey Winters

    Marketing Consultant–Published Author

    Assassin Becomes World Class Healer 
    by Jeffrey Winters 

    Chapter 1: Cafe’ Life 
    I am sitting in my favorite outdoor cafe’ in Buenos Aires. It’s called La Biela in the upscale Recoleta district. I know most of the waiters. I tip generously because they deserve it. They wear a bow tie with white shirts and a green v-neck vest. On their arm is a band that matches the vest. What I most appreciate about these men is their look of pride in how well they serve you. Often they smile as they gracefully carry your food and drink. It is November—spring time, and the most beautiful time in this glorious city.

     Raj ChawlaMira Prabhu and 1 other like this

  • Hero

    Hero Jenkins

    Author

    Project Dreamscape (a near future thriller involving kidnap and mind control)
    by Hero Jenkins 

    Chapter One
    Nature can be cruel when you’re running for your life. Shadows become silhouettes; random sounds become footsteps, screeches and howls a pursuer’s command to halt. Alone and in the dark, he questioned the wisdom of his escape. The mere attempt, he understood, could cost him his life. Yet staying, without a doubt, would cost him his soul.

    Daniel Pascucci clawed at the slippery mud as he climbed out of the ravine. He crouched and paused to listen. Then stood slowly, before he sprinted towards a near-by stand of trees. His intellect reminded him to keep to the shadows, to be careful to avoid the surveillance cameras.

     Paula FriedmanE.VAn Johnson and 3 others like this

  • E.VAn Johnson

    E.VAn

    E.VAn Johnson

    Lecturer/Creative writing/ Author/ Journalist

    Nice to know there are still heroes in the world. An intriguing and interesting opening, 

    EVJ

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Hero–your beginning is great!

  • Peter Bouchier

    Peter

    Peter Bouchier

    poetic essayist / amateur singer / shiplover / civil servant

    Circular Quay, Sydney, 1890. 
    A stiff sou’wester whirls through the ships’ riggings like an enormous harp. The clippers are moored, lazily rocking on the incoming tide, their beauty beyond compare. The powerful teak and iron hulls are like stallions, jerking anxiously to free themselves from the narrow harbour and go out to sea, towards freedom! The ships’ names perfectly match this uncontrollable urge: Brilliant, Thomas Stephens, Serica, Salamis, Cimba, The Tweed, Patriarch, Thermopylae… Cutty Sark. This last name makes me hold my breath: the ship of my dreams. How often did I stroll to the Channel coast, scanning the horizon for her white pyramid of sails, waiting in vain as she proved to have docked long before anybody even knew? Some said she never sailed in the first place, let alone broke the record. But insiders knew better: under Richard Woodget Her Ladyship at last became what she was meant to be ever since she was launched: the most beautiful and fastest ship in the fleet, though not in the tea trade but in the wool trade. 

    Originally written in Dutch, my ‘Nannie Trilogy’ is an essay in three parts about a sailor who sets sail on board his favourite ship for the first time. He experiences a very special encounter, which seems to turn out to be fatal…

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  • Len Robertson

    Len

    Len Robertson

    Independent Writing and Editing Professional

    Questing For Dragons 

    The main character is Pen. The richest man in Pen’s village wants her for his wife, an evil baron wants her in his bed, his witch wife wants her dead, the emperor offers a huge ransom capture the reborn Roxanne, and, worst of all, she’s disguised herself as a boy to squire a formidable yet wooden headed knight who’s seeking the Dragon Lord. 

    Blame it on Igor 

    For most of her life, Penelope had been thin and bony with an odd frog-like voice that made her an object of ridicule in her village. All those years, she prayed nightly to be someone else. Then, like magic, she did change, and with that change she learned the ugly truth about heartfelt wishes. They can be treacherous. 

    Like today. Without warning her life was in frightful jeopardy. “I don’t want to marry Igor,” she shouted at her father. “He’s an old man and he’s weak.”

     Hero JenkinsRaj Chawla like this

  • Elaina Portugal

    Elaina

    Elaina Portugal

    Writer

    I Couldn’t Run Fast Enough- Sweat pooled in my hand, making it hard to hold the razor blade. I wished for something with a handle, like a surgical knife or my old dissecting kit, anything sharp and easier to hold. Blue ink outlined the cuts I needed to make. I nervously grasped the back, stiff edge of the single edged razor, stolen from my father’s shaving kit, and began the descent into my waiting skin. When the blade pierced and sank into the top of the first line, the pain’s sharpness surprised me. I jerked my hand backwards, not letting go of the razor, and it sank in deeper, just like a knife slicing into softened butter. I gasped, fearing that I’d messed up the line. I needed this to be perfect—this Talisman, this proof. This… badge

     Hero JenkinsPaula Friedman like this

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Elaina–that’s awesome!

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  • Elaina Portugal

    Elaina

    Elaina Portugal

    Writer

    Thanks Carole- Now to get it published!

  • Donna Walo-Clancy

    Donna

    Donna Walo-Clancy

    Independent Author

    “This is going to be the best vacation ever,” yelled Meghan over the wind. 
    “You aren’t just kidding girlfriend. Do you realize that this is the first vacation we’ve had in four years?” Sarah yelled back. 
    Meghan Clark and Sarah Tolan had been best friends since kindergarten. After graduation, they chose to go to the same college together. They were best friends, but nothing alike. Meghan, strong and outspoken had always been there for Sarah, who was timid and quiet. 
    The purple convertible flew along the back roads of Maine towards its final destination of Camp Altwater. The car was full of camping equipment. 
    “We are so ready for the next two weeks,” claimed Meghan. “I think I over did it in the food department.” 
    “Yea, you were so busy concentrating on the food you forgot the propane tanks for the camp stove,” said Sarah sarcastically. 
    “Hey, let’s not get nasty now. Just remember, two weeks by ourselves, with no one to bother us. Maybe, just maybe, we’ll get some writing done.” 
    Sarah sighed. “I know. We both need to get our papers done for psychology. But I still think we should have told our roommate where we were going. Most people go to Florida or Cancun. Not us, no. We go totally in the opposite direction to the woods of Maine to disappear forever in the middle of the pine trees and black flies.” 
    Title- The Baby Factory 
    Main characters- Meghan Clark and Sarah Tolan 
    The two friends get railroaded into a working baby factory and try to escape and shut it down.

     Michelle LommenHero Jenkins like this

  • Dario Cannizzaro

    Dario

    Dario Cannizzaro

    Solutions Jedi

    “Every night I crawl under the blankets. Carefully close the door, no lights inside or out. The house is sleeping tight. Every night I crawl under the blankets with a small gun. The house is sleeping. No one knows I own this shiny little metal thing, no one. The house, no one in the house knows a single little thing about me. Every night, when I sneak into my world, I spread my full train of thoughts around these walls, wishing I was someone else. I don’t know who I am, they say it’s okay, but I don’t think so. How can it be okay if you don’t know who you are? Aren’t we supposed to know who we are, at least? Every night, when I’m alone in the reign of my thoughts, I slip this little metal thing into my mouth, feel the cold of the barrel, feel the little trigger in my fingers, and. Every night like a ritual. Every night, when the house is asleep, I put a gun into my mouth and pull the trigger.” 

    Connect with me on twitter for more sneak peeks…. @weissblut82

     Michelle LommenRaj Chawla and 3 others like this

  • Hero

    Hero Jenkins

    Author

    Disturbing, I like it!

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Dario–that’s a frickin’ awesome beginning! 
    Donna–looks like a fun read. I love the title.

  • Hero

    Hero Jenkins

    Author

    Subject Number Five 
    By Hero Jenkins 

    Chapter One 

    A woman laughed out loud the way the intoxicated did after a night of too much of a good time. A car’s horn blared, brakes squealed, a man shouted. 

    “Slow down you idiot!” The man screamed at the car that had come within a whisper of running him down. 

    “Yeah Asshole!” The woman screamed with thick slurred speech. “This is a parking lot, this ain’t NASCAR!” 

    The car sped away burning rubber as it went and a middle finger was extended out the window. 

    The woman resumed her high-pitched laughter as she weaved a zigzagged path across the nearly pitch black motel parking lot.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Hero–sounds like a good start.

  • Len Robertson

    Len

    Len Robertson

    Independent Writing and Editing Professional

    My novel, Revelations takes place forty years from now. It tells the story of Boone Dalton and Jennifer Strand who trek to Mars unaware that the next step in human evolution travels with them. They survive several assassination attempts and android ambushes because of what they carry only to find the Red Planet in the clutches of a deadly pandemic when they arrive. The way in which they overcome their many perils redefines the limits of Humanity, ushering in a rebirth, a second human Renaissance. 

    October 2046 
    Ius Chasma, Mars 

    The wall screen in Jennifer Strand’s lab brightened as she entered the room. A message in large block letters spread across the screen. “Jennifer,” it read, “I think you need to see this.” 

    See what, Jennifer wondered? “Ulysses,” she commanded the Ius Chasma’s central server. “Display any attachments.” 

    Nothing. “Ulysses, display attachments.” 

    The screen remained blank. 

    Another message spread across the screen. “Password. The scientist that’s your mother’s namesake.” 

    What? Oh. “Marie Curie.” 

    The screen continued blank. 

    The message had to have come from Boone Dalton, Jennifer groused to herself. The man could be so old-fashioned at times. “Ulysses. On-screen keyboard.”

  • Chuck David

    Chuck

    Chuck David

    Owner, Authoritative Editing and Chuck David Photography

    @Dario Cannizzaro That was very, very cool. Is it published?

  • Susannah MacDonald

    Susannah

    Susannah MacDonald

    Freelance artist, illustrator & teacher.

    @Dario – intriguing and creepy at the same time…can’t wait to read more!

  • Tshombye K. Ware

    Tshombye K.

    Tshombye K. Ware

    Inspirational Author/Poet/Motivational Speaker

    Caveat of Penitent 
    Larry Isree
    One man endowed with a special gift, now race against time to alter the horrific vision he beheld.

    Room, Canten Memorial Hospital, 4:00 A.M. Saturday
    I should’ve prayed that day. Maybe, just maybe, a few hours ago would’ve been different. Who am I kidding; everything led up to that moment. This is the first time I have been in the hospital. I am speechless. The cool sheets rest upon my lifeless body. The cold silence within the room carries the beeps echoing from the heart monitor. I watched the nurse slowly walk into the room. I think she hoped for some improvement, or at least a different display on the EKG.

     Paula FriedmanSusannah MacDonald and 2 others like this

  • Heather Marie Schuldt

    Heather Marie

    Heather Marie Schuldt

    Published Author

    Hello, writers!

    You are welcome to post your own 750 word count story including dinosaurs and/or graffiti in the May Short Story Contest…

    http://www.linkedin.com/groups/May-Graffiti-Short-Story-Contest-4731526%2ES%2E237177069?qid=0193c29c-c006-4d41-bc68-f3a9fe6b0bbc&trk=group_most_popular-0-b-ttl&goback=%2Egmp_4731526

    This is where many writers are growing in their craft of writing each month. Come jump in!

    Stories are due May 25, 2013.

    Happy writing!! :)

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  • Elaina Portugal

    Elaina

    Elaina Portugal

    Writer

    @ Hero- Dreamscape- Love the intensity and imagery- I was right there with him

  • Leslie Le Mon

    Leslie

    Leslie Le Mon

    Writer, Editor & Management Consultant

    “In later years, when he was asked to tell how it all began, James would think back to the big Victorian house on Orange Grove Avenue in South Pasadena – the big house, with its tower and gables and stained glass windows, the house his father had repaired and restored over the years, sometimes with James’ help, until it was the prettiest home on Orange Grove – at least in James’ estimation. 

    It was the house where James had grown up, from the time he was born. There was a framed photo on the wall in the main stairwell, of his mother Roz and his father …” 

    “Sircus of Impossible Magicks: Chosen” | Main characters: James, Alice, and Aiden | Two brothers and their cousin travel through time and space in L.A. to recover missing talismans and protect their families.

     Michelle LommenBarry V. and 1 other like this

  • Micki Peluso

    Micki

    Micki Peluso

    . . .And the Whippoorwill Sang at LSPdigital Publishing LLC

    The doctors strode into the emergency waiting room, nodding curtly to neighbors and friends, indicating that they want them to leave. The door swishes shut, entombing me with these harbingers of death, who sit in a semi-circle about ten feet from me, as if getting too close might somehow contaminate them. They introduce themselves, one by one, but their names wash over me unheard. It is the looks on their faces that I will always remember. 
    “I’m sorry,” one of them says, “there’s nothing we can do.” 
    The room begins to close me in. 
    “You may as well let us disconnect the life support machines,” 

    . . .And the Whipporwill Sang Main characters: Micki & Butch Peluso, six kids and a cast of friends–and one who is not. 

    Happy times, a sunny day, a driving drunk, eight lives forever changed.

     Raj ChawlaPaula Friedman and 3 others like this

  • Ginger Smith

    Ginger

    Ginger Smith

    Consumer Services Professional

    Adaptations 

    Head nurse Camille Madison thought she had things under control in her ER until Dr. Benjamin Boyles turned her world upside down. 

    — 

    Camille Madison woke early in anticipation of the changes the day would bring. She brewed a pot of her favorite French Vanilla flavored coffee and took her first cup out on the terrace. When she purchased this condo several years ago it had been the terrace that she had fallen in love with. 

    The white café table and chairs that adorned this favorite place of solace had been the first furniture purchased; the bedroom ensemble second. The living room and combination dining areas filled up with plush furnishings as well. The condo now reflected the independent yet totally feminine head nurse of the largest ER in Los Angeles County.

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  • Ginger Smith

    Ginger

    Ginger Smith

    Consumer Services Professional

    The Letter 

    Amber Hale once had the life she’d dreamed of… an expensive home, lavish things, and a husband she adored. Once… 

    === 

    Amber Hale sat in her red Nissan Altima Coup watching the rain pummel against her windshield. I hate the rain. They said a storm was coming, but I didn’t believe it. I mean an hour ago the sky was blue for crying out loud! 

    Several yards away the door to the post office loomed back at her, staring her down through the sheets of rain. She knew she had to go in. She had to get her mail. She’d avoided picking it up all week, and now it couldn’t wait any longer. There were bills to pay.

     Valerie Michele OliverMichelle Lommen and 1 other like this

  • Justin Hough

    Justin

    Justin Hough

    Front-end Web Developer

    The Last Guardian by Justin Hough 

    A young man knows he is different, but when everything starts unraveling the truth about his past and future lies in a race bent on his destruction. 

    “The setting sun cascaded orange, red and purple hues across the sky lined by New York City. Where high-rises and skyscrapers once stretched towards the heavens now only rubble remained. In their place now stands a lone starship hovering. It’s hull stretching a mile in every direction from downtown and blanketing much of the city in complete darkness. Boulevards once filled with traffic jams and pedestrians are now largely devoid of life. The smoke and ash so thick in some areas of downtown that it looks like a fog bank has rolled in. A bustling metropolis brought to its knees.”

     Mirta O.Barry V. like this

  • Ayesha Karim

    Ayesha

    Ayesha Karim

    Student at New Jersey City University

    I like the challenge it sounds like an awesome thing to do. I’ll try!

     Raj Chawla likes this

  • Tom

    Tom Bleakley

    Author, blogger, musician, activist at N/A Independent

    Jay Slater looked at the pills in his hand, those remaining of the thirty that had been prescribed. He held them to his nose and inhaled deeply. They smelled of doctors’ offices and hospitals. He glanced at the plastic container. The directions were specific–one tablet daily at bedtime. He grinned. If one tablet was good, two were better, and four would be perfect. He opened his hand and counted the pills again. He had done the math correctly. He threw four of the tablets to the back of his throat and swallowed them dry, putting the remainder back into the container and snapping the lid shut. He reached for the bottle of wine and took several large swallows. He sat back in the easy chair, closed his eyes, and let his mind drift. The effect was kicking in already, like heaven. He felt happy. He wanted to talk.
    A sudden wave of loneliness broke over his reverie, pulling his thoughts in several directions. The room was spinning. He opened his eyes, blinked, and looked around. He felt and heard his heart beat. Images started to flow, merging one into the next. He tried to sing and laughed at the strangeness of the sound of his voice. His lips felt numb. His tongue was thick and dry. He heard voices. Was someone talking to him? He closed his eyes tight. The images became unpleasant. He opened his eyes and tried to stand. He couldn’t get out of the chair. So hard to move. Let me just rest, he thought. Just let me close my eyes for a minute and rest.
    The voices changed. A deep male voice was calling his name. He opened his eyes. The room was still spinning–a different room, drab and gray. Where was he? He blinked several times.
    “We’re your lawyers.”
    He stared at the man who spoke. Said nothing. Why in the hell did he need a lawyer? He closed his eyes again. Something was wrong. Very wrong.
    Serenity: Main characters; Bob Riley (trial lawyer). A novel about a prescription drug causing a user to murder his wife . . or did it?

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  • Mark

    Mark Bowman

    Experienced Technical Writer-Manufacturing, Laboratory, IT, Author-Children’s Lit

    Today in the Enchanted Thicket, 
    Thaddeus Theodore Thumperknot woke up early to do his chores around the bridge. 
    He could hear his new neighbor finishing building his new house. Just then, Fredrick Fugate Fastcar, the clock master from down the lane, came down the stairs to Thaddeus’ porch under the bridge. 
    Thaddeus thought that they would go pay his new neighbor a visit. “Good idea,” Fredrick said. They walked down the lane to his new neighbor’s new house. When they arrived at Joey’s new house, all they could see was the big red doors standing wide open and a window with the sash slightly raised. 
    Thaddeus and Fredrick started up the sidewalk towards Joey’s house but they fell up the invisible steps before reaching the big red doors on the invisible porch. “Anybody home?” they called into the big double doors. 
    (NEEDING AN ILLUSTRATOR)

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  • James DeAcutis

    James

    James DeAcutis

    Author of Peter Cooper and the Pirate King

    Peter Cooper and the Pirate King…

    The man looked up at the rapidly dissipating storm that hung low overhead and chuckled with satisfaction as he gazed at the blood-soaked dagger he held. He squeezed his thumb and forefinger against the base of the blade, near the hilt, and ran them up to the tip. When his beautiful, enchanted fingers had finished their journey they held a weighty glob of “youth-juice” which he greedily brought to his lips and tingled as he took it in. He turned and walked back towards the gnarled and lonely tree, his luxurious, blood-streaked, brown hair blowing in the frenetic last breeze of the receding storm. 
    He felt alive again!

    Bill Kyuper – the Pirate King – having just rejuvenated his old, tired self with one of the many young humans he’s sacrificed throughout the centuries…

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  • Valerie Michele Oliver

    Valerie Michele

    Valerie Michele Oliver

    HeArts and Entertainment

    The Child didn’t know who to talk to or how to talk about it. She had a feeling to keep it to herself. 

    The family was traveling in their 1952 green Plymouth on a rural Pennsylvania road to visit friends, when it happened. Acres of tilled, flat farmland surrounded them and in the distance The Child saw a woman walking on the side of the road toward the car. She wore a large bonnet, a long white dress narrowly fitted at the waist, with a ruffled collar, long sleeves, and a woven basket over her arm. She carried herself with 

    - “Standing Naked In Rose Petals” by Eleanora Amendolara with Valerie Michele Oliver 
    - Main Character is Olena, Eleanor, Eleanora (same person) 
    - Summary: “Standing Naked In Rose Petals” tells an amazing tale of discovery, identity, and commitment to one’s true purpose, as the most enchanting, magical, and rewarding life of all is using our own stories to become more human. 

    Great idea!

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  • Michael Mullin

    Michael

    Michael Mullin

    Principal at Gemiknight Studios, LLC

    Cool thread. I’m in. 

    TITLE: 8 
    MAIN CHAR: Creepy 
    SUMMARY: YA retelling of Snow White 

    The stories we pass down from parent to child 
    Were once filled with darkness, but somehow turned mild. 
    We tweak and revise, and when all else fails 
    We choose to omit certain crucial details. 
    Until they’re forgotten, and nobody knows 
    How a story originally, truthfully goes. 

    Take Snow White, for example. A popular tale 
    With plenty of unpleasant truths to unveil. 
    For instance, I’d wager that you didn’t know 
    Seven lived in that cottage … while one lived below. 

    It wasn’t always that way. They once lived as eight. 
    ‘Til he changed into strange: staying up, sleeping late. 
    He ate less and less, turning skeleton-thin, 
    And shaved his beard down to a patch on his chin. 
    He was twisted and moody. A freak to the letter. 
    Calling him “Creepy” didn’t make things much better.

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  • Philip Mann

    Philip

    Philip Mann

    Author at large

    That is fan TAS tic , michael .!

  • Michael Mullin

    Michael

    Michael Mullin

    Principal at Gemiknight Studios, LLC

    Thanks so much Philip! That’s the first of 3 alt fairytales in the one book: TaleSpins. Lots of great stuff above – still getting through it all. (for a writer, I’m a reeeeeealllly slow reader.)

  • Jeffrey Winters

    Jeffrey

    Jeffrey Winters

    Marketing Consultant–Published Author

    Gil is a smart assassin who works with a world class hacker. He is badly wounded and close to death. A Buddhist doctor comes to the cave near Bucharest and tells him he can save him. In return he must study around the world with the most effective shamans, healers and doctors.He lifts his head and tells the doc to save him. He agrees to become a world class healer, a reversal from his assassin life. 
    Chapter: 
    When I was younger I studied with a assassin in South Korea. At first she pretended not to notice my testosterone screaming through my pants. That ended on our first night. She called me into her bedroom and took off her clothes. Then she undressed me and looked at my erection. “You are a predictable assassin. But that is true of most men, except my eunuch friends,” she said. With gentle hands, she stroked my chest and cheek. “Let me show you how to make love to an Asian killer. Take me, then listen to what I tell you.”

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  • David Litwin

    David

    David Litwin

    designer & author

    Title: The Coachman Cometh” 

    “Pinocchio fled, darting to and fro through the canvas carnival booths. Sweat and fear poured out of his body and his mind fought to grasp the horrific transformation materializing around him. Moments before, Pinocchio’s newly developed brain had been flooded with sensory pleasure. Now, his mental faculties were locked on a single course of action – escape. Breathlessly scrambling from impending doom, his fearful flight was a solo one. Pinocchio’s Pleasure Island compatriots were incapable of fleeing along side of him. Though they undoubtedly shared in Pinocchio’s desire for freedom, their new physical characteristics prevented that request. 

    For they were no longer boys…”

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  • Mirta Oliva

    Mirta

    Mirta Oliva

    Author, Visual artist, Illustrator

    BIRDYJOSH and BIRDYLU ~ A Paper Birds’ Story 
    Main Character: Birdylu 
    Summary: About the struggles of two paper birds to survive amidst an unknown environment and… 

    “It all started when one recent summer day I remembered the origami 
    figures I used to make as a child and later on as an adult: the paper boat 
    was easy, who hasn’t made an origami boat? Easy as well were the box, 
    hat and other objects. My true desire, though, was to make a paper bird 
    but this project turned out to be a little bit more difficult… 

    After a few trials and errors, a typical paper bird was created but that 
    was not enough to satisfy what had been lurking in my mind. Somehow, 
    I had envisioned a…”

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  • E.VAn Johnson

    E.VAn

    E.VAn Johnson

    Lecturer/Creative writing/ Author/ Journalist

    Hi, My first attemp at romantic fiction. 

    Aphroditi’s Isle. 
    Can a woman really find romance on a holiday island? Or it all just sun sea sand and sex. 
    Jane Walters believes she has found the man of her dreams. I she right or is he a fantasy she has created out of her own need for love 

    EVJ

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  • Kel Mansfield

    Kel

    Kel Mansfield

    writer

    It’s pitch black. 
    An engine hums monotonously. 
    It’s excruciatingly hot. Every breath is a struggle. The world is vibrating and pressing in on itself. 
    The desire to run away is overwhelming, but it’s impossible to move. 
    Just when the torture seems as if it will never end, the engine’s note changes and there’s a series of bumps and judders, then stillness. 
    The engine continues to hum quietly. 
    The calm lasts for a couple of heartbeats, shattered by the metallic screech of a sliding steel door and heavy footsteps crunching on concrete. 

    The Flyball 5 
    by K.J. Mansfield 

    The adventures of five unwanted puppies cruelly abandoned on a winter’s night.

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  • William Martin

    William

    William Martin

    Passionate, published author and educator

    Will Harris spotted the plume of dust rising along the winding gravel road long before he saw the pickup truck that produced it. He sat on the front porch of the ranch house, watching the dust rise while he scratched the ears of the Border collie sitting beside him. 
    “That’s Hank coming down the road, Blue,” he said to the dog. “I’d bet you a steak on it.” The dog looked up at him with clear, blue eyes as if to say he would pass on the wager. In Will’s nine years at the ranch he seldom knew Hank Larson 

    “Bar-T Winter” 
    Hank Larson 
    An old-style rancher in the 1950s cannot adjust to the world that is closing in on him, so he begins to deal with it in ways that have worked for him in the past on hard ranches and during the war –with escalating violence.

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  • Marty Sturino

    Marty

    Marty Sturino

    Business Consultant and Publisher – Author of “The Autogrill Murder” and “Letters from Calabria”

    I can see it clearly, as if it were just a week or so ago, although it must have been a morning back in mid-October that I now recall; perhaps the most beautiful autumn day of all. The starry black sky of the previous night had been gently coaxed into the darkest gray, then the deepest hue of indigo, and finally into to a brilliant blue, as golden rays, streaming from morning’s rosy fingered dawn rose slowly from the far away horizon to warm the land, and gently lift the veil of soft wispy vapors from the sleepy forest lawn. 

    The Forest 
    Lucas and Larissa make their way back home after the war.

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  • Ron Button

    Ron

    Ron Button

    I am marketing my book.Poems and short stories.I will boast,women like what I write.I’m batting a 100%

    My story is about a kingdom before time,before the garden of Eden,and the most treasured flower in the paradise,Sunshine Blossom.©2000. Samples can be found at http://www.givemearingllc.com.
    Posted by Ron Button.

    Sent from my LG Mobile

    Writers <groups-noreply@linkedin.com> wrote:

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  • Peggy Gregerson

    Peggy

    Peggy Gregerson

    Communications Director at Janas Associates

    “Girls, are you decent?” 
    I recognized the voice of Mrs. Banks, the housemother of Webb Hall. 
    “Not if we can help it,” said my roommate, May. 
    “You’d better hope she didn’t hear that,” I said as I crossed the room to open the door. 
    Mrs. Banks, whose round, florid face reminded me of portraits of Henry the VIII . . . 
    _____________________________________________________________________ 
    Historical novel based on the true story of how Wesleyan University ended coeducation after forty years.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Peggy–good start. 
    Marty–good descriptions. 
    William–Interesting beginning. 
    Kel–You got my attention. 
    Mirta–Curious idea. I love the title. 
    David–Very interesting. 
    E.Van–this is a good story line. Can you post the first 100 words?

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  • Michael Poeltl

    Michael

    Michael Poeltl

    Marketing Manager at Marketing Manager

    It wasn’t your fault. These are healing words; something Tess’s therapist had her write out a thousand times when she was twelve. It became her mantra, a reassurance that what had happened to her baby brother could in no way be her fault. 
    Today, fifteen years after the suicide that had devastated her life and the lives of her parents, she finds power in those words once more. 
    “I’m sorry,” says Sam, her husband, who is standing stock still in front of her. All that separates them is the granite topped island situated in the middle of a kitchen under renovation. It is the only working surface available to lean on should he confirm her fears. – From: Her Past’s Present (New release)

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  • Valerie Michele Oliver

    Valerie Michele

    Valerie Michele Oliver

    HeArts and Entertainment

    Raj, Michele, and Mirta – Thanks for “liking” the excerpt from “Standing Naked In Rose Petals: A Healer’s Memoir.”

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  • Valerie Michele Oliver

    Valerie Michele

    Valerie Michele Oliver

    HeArts and Entertainment

    Anemia choked my chest, and the breath became strange and stranger to me as we made the climb to reach her sacred space of tears that flowed from the heavens down the mountain into her liquid womb to fill her up: the largest cup for the seeker. I was so breathless that the best I could do was to lay down my burdened body over a flat rock and lean my face in as close as I could, darkness regarding darkness. 

    - “Leaning In” by Valerie Michele Oliver 
    - Main Character is The Seeker 
    - Summary: “Leaning In” is one of the stories to appear in “The Short Stories of Sarah’s Last Words”; it’s planned as a separate publication inspired by my creative nonfiction memoir (Sarah’s Last Words) that is currently in the book proposal stage to send out to agents.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Valerie–good descriptive writing.

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  • Valerie Michele Oliver

    Valerie Michele

    Valerie Michele Oliver

    HeArts and Entertainment

    @Carole – Thanks for the comment!

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Michael–Very intriguing beginning. I would definitely read further.

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  • Jason White

    Jason

    Jason White

    Marketing Communications Strategist at RealPage, Inc.

    Frost 
    Main Character: Gabriel Frost 
    One Line Summary: What happens when a guardian angel won’t stop guarding his charge? 

    Gabriel sits on the wall at the top of the watch spire perched like an owl. The wind tears through his thin silken robes but he doesn’t feel cold. His long white hair writhes in the wind like ghosts as he stares at the ocean. The time just before the dawn is where he finds the most solace. Being alone and looking over the land he has called home for twenty years calms his nerves. It makes him forget the hatred waiting for him in the courtyards of the castle below.

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  • B. Lo

    B.

    B. Lo

    Customer Support Specialist at Flocabulary

    It is too dark for proper filming, but Taj sets her camera on the tripod. The cobblestone resembles the backs of a few thousand shiny toads; each one slick and glistening with rain. The sidewalks of the West Village are Friday-Night-Crowded with two types of people: the young people who want to look older as they dart in and out of open art galleries and candle-lit bars and the old people who want to seem young as they come from the same galleries and the same bars. Then there is Taj.

    Title: Bulletproof
    MC: Taj Martin (1 of 6)

    Bullet proof visualizes a future where New York has plummeted into a police state as the government does it’s best to ward off the possible threat of super powered humans

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    B.Lo–Sounds like it might be an interesting story.

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  • Clay Gilbert

    Clay

    Clay Gilbert

    Chief Editor at PDMI Publishing, LLC

    Title: Annah 
    Summary: Annah is a young female of a distant world called Evohe; a world thought destroyed during a war with Earth. Gary Holder, a middle-aged spacer from Earth, learns the truth when his ship crashes on Annah’s world, and together, they learn that the distance between two warring worlds can sometimes be as great or as small as the distance between two hearts. 

    Sample: 

    The stars were full of music. 
    Annah had always thought so. The young one sat on one of the great stones that surrounded what had been her parents’ hearth-fire, on what had been their homeground–and hers–and, looking up, watched the bright light-currents pulse and wane above her in the Sea of Stars, as she had often done before, and as she did every night now that they were gone. Around her, deeper in the Grove, were other homegrounds, and other fires. But for all the warmth she would find there, they might well be as distant as the starry dark.

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  • Joe Pemberton

    Joe

    Joe Pemberton

    Author; Self-employed

    . . . The plane crashed into Greenheys School bursting everything into flames. Houses collapsed, babies screamed, mothers wailed and old men prayed, until all that was left was the old prefab at the corner of Great Western Street. To round things off, Mr Meskie’s ice-cream van sped round the corner playing ‘Stardust’ by Nat King Cole. It stopped right in front of James’s house. 

    “Forever And Ever Amen” is the story of the childhood experiences of James, a nine-year old living in Moss Side, Manchester in the late 1960s.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Clay–I like the first sentence. Grabs my interest. 
    Joe–Excitement begins with the first sentence! Really cool!

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  • Joe Pemberton

    Joe

    Joe Pemberton

    Author; Self-employed

    It gets betters …

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  • Mark L. Levinson

    Mark L.

    Mark L. Levinson

    Writer, Editor, Heb>Eng Translator – currently available part-time

    The title is TENDER. I’m not the author, I’m the translator. The main character, Arik, is a bartender who is saved from disillusionment by love. First 100 words: “Vivid red. Stripes, closely spaced, form a stenciling of lips on the edge of the glass tumbler. With one hand he grasps it; with the other he tries to clean it, wiping with his twisted thumb. The flowing water wets his hands, fills the glass, and overflows into the steel sink. Galvanized steel. Eliminates rusting but not noise. 
    ‘It’s not coming off,’ he thinks to himself. The drumming of the water penetrates his mind and provides him some moments of peace. Alcohol roams his blood. Beats pound in his head. Noises and conversations surround him. Dim lights blunt the faces of the people who glance at him.”

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  • Christine Mazurk

    Christine

    Christine Mazurk

    Published Author

    “Passion’s Race” – CJ Fallon, business woman turned pro triathlete risks everything, even her life, to prove her worth. 

    The twenty-mile mark. 

    The rich smell of the earth hung in the air, and she breathed it in as she filled her lungs with oxygen. Her long, powerful legs propelled her forward–closer to the end. CJ Fallon caught sight of Kate Brooks, her best friend and volunteer photographer, who had a knack for capturing CJ’s quest in digital form. Seeing Kate, camera aimed and ready, gave CJ a burst of energy, and she pushed her pace.

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  • Clay Gilbert

    Clay

    Clay Gilbert

    Chief Editor at PDMI Publishing, LLC

    Christine–this is a good intro in terms of putting the reader in the moment of the scene. Builds the suspense, so that we’re interested in seeing what’s waiting at the finish line of this race.

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  • Len Robertson

    Len

    Len Robertson

    Independent Writing and Editing Professional

    The book is the sic fi novel Revelations which comes out on July 1. October 2046 Ius Chasma, Mars The wall screen in Jennifer Strand’s lab brightened as she entered the room. A message in large block letters spread across the screen. “Jennifer,” it read, “I think you need to see this.” See what, Jennifer wondered? “Ulysses,” she commanded the Ius Chasma’s central server. “Display any attachments.” Nothing. “Ulysses, display attachments.” The screen remained blank. Another message spread across the screen. “Password. The scientist that’s your mother’s namesake.” What? Oh. “Marie Curie.” The screen continued blank. The message had to have come from Boone Dalton, Jennifer groused to herself. The man could be so old-fashioned at times. “Ulysses. On-screen keyboard.”

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  • Slavyan Yorgakiev

    Slavyan

    Slavyan Yorgakiev

    writer at Self Employed Independent Peoplesoft Consultant

    SKEDESA-SPARTACUS SISTER-SKEDESA 
    SPARTACUS WAS A LEGENDARY GLADIATOR WHO INITIATED THE FIRST LARGE-SCALE REBELLION OF GLADIATORS IN ROME. THIS STORY TELLS ABOUT HIS SISTER SKEDESA, A WOMAN WARRIOR, AND HER BELOVED MAN ZIPPER WHO WAS ALSO CAPTURED BY THE ROMANS AND BECAME A GLADIATOR. 
    THE LOVE BETWEEN SKEDESA AND ZIPPER IS EXCEPTIONALLY ENDURING, INDESTRUCTIBLE. THEY PASS THROUGH A STRING OF HARDSHIPS UNTIL THEY ARE FINALLY REUNITED FOREVER. ON THEIR WAY THEY MEET THRACIAN AND CELTIC PRIESTS, FIGHT IN BATTLES WITH ROMANS AND WITH THE POWER OF DARKNESS WHICH EMERGES FROM THE UNDERGROUND KINGDOM. THAT IS A SEMI-REALISTIC, SEMI-FANTASY TALE THAT WILL HOLD YOU SPELLBOUND AND ENCHANTED. IT IS FASCINATING, AND WHILE READING IT, YOU WILL BE PERMEATED BY THE FEELING THAT YOU ARE WATCHING A THRILLING HOLLYWOOD FILM.

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  • Kevin M. Raidy, MDiv.

    Kevin M.

    Kevin M. Raidy, MDiv.

    Faith based and non-profit senior executive, passionate communicator, spiritual teacher and insightful author.

    BE NAKED, BE YOU: Dare to Live a Life of Acceptance, Authenticity, and Vulnerability 

    Naked isn’t a 4-Letter Word – 

    Few words evoke as much fear, anxiety and downright pain as this one: naked. (Admit it, you’re probably cringing as we speak!) For most of us, the thought of being naked, particularly in front of others, is so challenging as to be crippling, or at least life altering. 
    Often times when you feel most vulnerable, it is when standing naked in front of a mirror, another person, or in a group. Case in point: millions fear going to the doctor’s office for their routine physical because they know, at some point, they will have to be… naked. 
    Women and even men feign headaches and a hundred other excuses not to be intimate with their partners because they know that, at some point, they will have to be… naked. And don’t even me started on what it feels like to be a gawky junior high schooler getting naked in front of your peers for the first time. 
    Well, okay, get me started: 
    It All Goes Back to Childhood (Specifically, Junior High!) 
    Junior high is pretty much ground zero for public nakedness. In grade school you have recess, which pretty much means you just dash out of the classroom, goof off for half-an-hour and come back to the classroom, rain or shine, hot or cold, sweating at your desk, doesn’t matter. 
    But junior high? Junior high has classes in Physical Education (PE), and after PE… you shower. With other guys. In the same room. Naked. I repeat: Naked. With other guys. In the same room. 
    I’d been dreading it all summer, ever since I overheard some “big kids” talking about it at the playground. So I can vividly remember my first time showering with other guys in junior high. Coming back in from PE, hot and sweaty, thinking maybe there will be a few other kids not wanting to shower, that I can “get away” with going back to class huffing and wheezing and dripping sweat and nobody would notice, but that wouldn’t be the case. All the guys were………….

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  • Anne Mackin

    Anne

    Anne Mackin

    Writer and Author

    First 100 words of AMERICANS AND THEIR LAND: 

    Nothing has shaped the American character as fundamentally as the sheer abundance of land and resources that met the European colonist, that met the westward-moving settler, and that still appears to meet the American suburbanite pressing into the exurbs. Abundant land supported the frenzied colonial race to procure and use resources—the race that became the large and vigorous American economy. Abundance has supported the prosperity that underpins America’s democratic attitudes, all founded on the belief that there can be enough for all. Plentiful land fueled the individual fantasies of fulfillment that drew settlers across mountains and prairies . . . 

    –from AMERICANS AND THEIR LAND, from UMich Press, describes America’s history of dividing resources among its people; how we built a democracy that rests on abundant resources; and how it falters as resources grow scarcer.

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  • Valerie Michele Oliver

    Valerie Michele

    Valerie Michele Oliver

    HeArts and Entertainment

    @Sylvia – Thanks for “liking” the excerpt from “Standing Naked In Rose Petals: A Healer’s Memoir.” 

    @Jacob – Thumbs up on Frost. I can’t wait to read it about the renegade angel.

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  • Vicki King

    Vicki

    Vicki King

    Author

    “Kingdom of the Green Glass Straw” – Main character – Tristabelle Kelley – Was the mysterious Mumford Farm a figment of her imagination or was it real? 

    “Aunt Emma?” 

    The sound of my own voice shattered the night and woke me from a deep sleep. I sat up in bed and released a sigh. Brushing the moisture from my eyes, I lay back on my side and gazed at the clock. It was 3:30 a.m., July 29th, 2008. I was officially eighteen years old. 

    It had been nine long years since the accident, yet occasionally, I would still dream of her. In my restful slumber, I could hear her call my name; and when I came running, she would cup my hands in hers and kiss them.

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  • Ron Bay, Jr.

    Ron

    Ron Bay, Jr.

    Regional Manager at ServiceMaster

    Title- Little Heathens 
    Main Character- Ronnie 
    Theme- Innocence, adventure, and discovery with four siblings growing up in Los Angeles in the early 1960’s. 

    A favorite family movie is “The Burbs”, and one of the memorable lines in the movie was uttered by Corey Feldman, “Man, I love this neighborhood”. I know why I love “The Burbs” so much; it reminds me a lot of the neighborhood where my siblings and I grew up and I share the sentiment with Corey Feldman’s character, Ricky. We had wacky neighbors (and we were wacky neighbors), strange houses, conspiracy theories, teenagers and toddlers, and plenty of adventure to relish. If you haven’t seen the movie, you should rent it and enjoy, and if you do, you will get a feeling of déjà vu (having read the narrative I am about to elucidate).

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  • Doug Christi

    Doug

    Doug Christi

    Writer

    “The Haunting of Ray Lucier” a coming-of-age novel about a 17 year old covering the war in Vietnam as a photo-journalist. 

    It’s been more than four decades, and I still cannot excise the sound from my head. It permeates my thoughts like a cancer and devours my sleep with ruthless insatiability. But it is not the only ghost that haunts me.

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  • Stephanie Willimon

    Stephanie

    Stephanie Willimon

    Administrative and Writer

    “Tilted Southern Wind”- by Stephanie Willimon. Add together a tumultuous childhood, a great deal of alcohol and a dash of cocaine and you get the winds of life a little tilted. (poetry book) 

    RAMBLING- I have a hiding place when Spring 
    rushes in. 
    Construct the barrier 
    against the one thing 
    that twists my being. 
    I’m a tea cup 
    ready to be filled 
    to the brim. 
    But only dusts 
    settle in my crevices. 
    Shell shock! 
    Heart block! 
    Time to bum rush 
    complacency! 
    Catching the suspect 
    in the glade. 
    Waiting for the readiness 
    response. ( and that’s all I can share for now)

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  • Donna Quick

    Donna

    Donna Quick

    Author / Freelance Editor

    Novel Title: Stolen Sunrise. 
    Teddi Greison must take custody of nieces she never knew existed and prove her brother is innocent of murdering his wife, so that she can get back the resort she built from the ground up. 

    First 88 words: 
    Mother Nature rose to the occasion of once again being fickle. Yesterday’s high temperature of eighty-two set a new record for the end of September along the shores of Lake Ontario. It looked like she might set another record today for the most drastic change in weather from one day to another. We’d be lucky if temperatures hit fifty, today. That kind of diversity wasn’t good for fruit farming. We still had orchards of apples to process before the end of the harvesting season in late October.

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  • Christine Gardner

    Christine

    Christine Gardner

    Writer at home

    Christine Gardner. True story ‘Not Guilty’ available at Amazon on Kindle and paperback. 

    Justice A’Beckett then asked if there was any difference between ‘the fury she worked herself into and the fury which a physically sound and vindictive man might work himself into against the person who had offended him’. Dr. Gaffney replied ‘In the case of a strong man it was anger, and anger alone and resentment. In this case it was not that so much as worry and anxiety about her own condition’. 

    Author’s Note 

    This is not a whodunit; there is no mystery here about who committed the brutal murders of three children. The crime is vividly described both by the police and the perpetrator, with no room for doubt as to what happened, as well as the how and when of the crime.

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  • Soji Obebe

    Soji

    Soji Obebe

    Deputy Director (Admin) at Ogun-Oshun River Basin Dev Authority

    Igbasan, our village, was a cluster of thirty houses with close to three hundred inhabitants. It could go for a classic example of a little town without much to see but a lot to talk about. We had neither recreation centre nor impressive mansions to boast of. All the houses were alike in shapes and sizes: rectangular mud walls covered by rusty corrugated iron sheets. Aside from the open ground all around the church where we kicked grapes as balls for our soccer matches, there were hardly other places of interest. However, there was Pa Sam, the catechist, his wife, and their two sons who were the cynosure of all eyes and subject of many conversations in the village. 
    From “A Mind to Atone” by Soji Obebe published in 2004 by Caltop Publications Nigeria Ltd.

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  • Valerie Michele Oliver

    Valerie Michele

    Valerie Michele Oliver

    HeArts and Entertainment

    @Soji – Already I am intrigued because this is about a life style that is like another world to me–outside of my usual experiences.

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  • Soji Obebe

    Soji

    Soji Obebe

    Deputy Director (Admin) at Ogun-Oshun River Basin Dev Authority

    Thanks Val. Good day.

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  • Kris Kramer

    Kris

    Kris Kramer

    Assistant Vice President at JPMorgan Chase

    Sanctuary 
    Main Character – Daniel, a young priest searching for his true purpose in life. 
    In 9th century Britain, a priest finds himself trapped in a war between and angel and a demon. 

    It all began on a day soaked in blood. 
    A terrible storm brewed off the coast of Rogwallow in Wessex, turning the skies in the south black and everything else a twisted, roiling grey. Heavy winds buffeted the small church house I ministered to, causing the soggy roof timbers to shudder under their force and the unlatched wooden door to slam shut over and over again. The faint scent of incense had long ago given way to the pungent stench of warm blood and entrails spilled across the coarse stone floor. And the knife at my neck was cold, sharp and desperate for another victim.

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  • Clay Gilbert

    Clay

    Clay Gilbert

    Chief Editor at PDMI Publishing, LLC

    I would beware of personifying inanimate objects. I doubt the knife itself was ‘desperate’ for much of anything.

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  • Scott Davis

    Scott

    Scott Davis

    Writer at ScotchyJ

    The name of the book is “The Flight of Freedom: Ashes in the Fire Vol. II 
    It is a collection of prose and short stories. The entire purpose of which is to make people feel good about life. The opening of this work is a poem. 

    Never Let Me Down 

    Letters, 
    scattered about all over the floor, 
    pieces of you and me, 
    back when the world was free. 

    Pictures and distorted facts, 
    piled up high and all around, 
    can’t help it if I don’t know why, 
    but don’t worry none, 
    it’s just my life, 
    actually, 
    what I pretend it to be. 

    Old cars, 
    (old friends) 
    good for the memories, 
    but not the ride, 
    they rust away 
    (turn to dust) 
    in the junkyard of my mind, 
    Never Let Me Down. 

    I go, 
    through the attic 
    and find two fingerprints 
    and two snowflakes 
    identical and the same 
    but half the time, 
    I lose my mind 
    and forget my name. 

    A moron in the rain 
    without a coat 
    all alone 
    in the freezing cold. 

    Forgotten lives, 
    and past lovers, 
    nothing but leaves in the autumn, 
    (beautiful they were in spring) 
    just clutter up the ground 
    in front of my back door, 
    don’t serve any purpose 
    but to remind me 
    how good they looked 
    on the way out of here 
    Never Let Me Down. 

    The light shines, 
    somewhere upstairs, 
    often unnoticed, 
    blocked by walls, 
    I can still think of the new, 
    (things I sometimes misplace or lose) 
    always come back to me 
    (reliable as lint 
    that never leaves my navel). 

    You never let me down, 
    even when I was on the ground 
    always close at hand 
    when I’ve had to make a stand 
    I’ll Never Let You Down.

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  • Scott Amis

    Scott

    Scott Amis

    Historical Fiction Writer

    Clay – I disagree on the knife in Kris’ piece – an inanimate object appropriately and well personified in this case. Trick is to not let such go overboard.

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  • Nancy Eckert

    Nancy

    Nancy Eckert

    Yeah, well, I would if I knew where to put it (don’t even think of any smart remarks). 

    Or them…how about I offer yet one more glitch in my first novel, A Taste for Truth (Thistle Brown) which has been on Amazon since the end of November, pulled and replaced…well, here we are now: 

    Now all too familiar with my tales of woe (to a select groups) about A Taste for Truth, 
    there is more. I’m having to re-write the entire novel. Not only did 
    I not send the less-than-perfect ms back, I was stupid enough NOT 
    to check it once again. And again, I’d sent, not only the non-corrected 
    novel, but its first draft. Why don’t I just give up? Because not only 
    am I not that sort of person, but when it is available on Kindle, it 
    will have new readers, as well as the corrected paperback for those 
    who have no Kindle (such as I). 

    Is this clear…sorta? And I actually have a book-siging, and a radio interview (broadcast throughout the word – not). 

    Then there is the saga, so far in six books; but here’s the thing. The first two volumes were over 800 pages each. Can’t you see see readers swaming the streets to get to book stores. I’m not if not practical: So I cut them in half, surprised by how well they worked. We all know, do we not, that big honking books don’t see these day unless the writer is VERY special. Sour grapes? Heaven’s no! I love those writers I now have in mind.

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  • Mrellan Harahan

    Mrellan

    Mrellan Harahan

    Writer of Historical Fiction and sometimes nonsense

    This is from my WIP an episodic serial novel BESIDE THE GOLDEN DOOR. This is a historical novel about an eighteen year old boy who immigrates to NYC in 1888 after his mother has been brutally murdered.

    Liam stood on the rise behind his home watching the cottage, he was born in, burn in a funeral pyre for his mother. He swore he would never forget this moment or these feelings. Pressing his fingernails into his palms to block out the pain in his heart, Liam reminded himself he was not a child and, only children cried. Only children felt they would die without the comfort and intimacy of their mother’s. Childhood had forever passed for Liam when he heard his mother’s screams and the grunts of the taxman’s thugs as they raped and beat her to death. Hatred and anger welled up in him so hard it choked in his throat.

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  • marty nalitz

    marty

    marty nalitz

    Social Marketing

    My Uncle Bob used to say when you’re wrestling a gorilla you don’t get to quit when you’re tired, you can only quit when the gorilla is tired. He formulated this world view as he did most of his others, from the experience of being a legendary car salesman. Some said the best that Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania had ever seen. 
    Like all his other observations I came to realize the truth in this one as that old gorilla wore me down time and again; three ex-wives, and seven years in prison for starters. (Interesting that I put the ex-wives before prison.) 

    Jack Reno is a reforming white-collar criminal, except nobody wants him to change.

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  • Stephen Dunne

    Stephen

    Stephen Dunne

    Reception at Hilton Dublin

    The Crystal & The Peak 
    Main Character – Shora 
    After the death of her Grandfather, Shora’s frustration takes control of her and she joins a weak rebellion fighting against the evil Empire in control of her home. 

    ————————————————————————————————————————– 

    Shora clung to her mother’s dress, spying at the makeshift bed in the centre of their home. 

    “How is he today?” She asked. 

    Her mother’s voice trembled. “The sickness is worse. It won’t be long. He’s slipping in and out of consciousness and not much of what he tries to say makes any sense.” 

    “There must be a cure! There must be something we can do to stop it.” 

    “Rallmar is a rotting slum, child. There aren’t many people here who can even save themselves.” 

    In that moment, Shora realised her mother had given up hope; maybe even from the beginning of her grandfather’s illness. Her frustration broiled.

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  • marty nalitz

    marty

    marty nalitz

    Social Marketing

    “Wrestling with Gorillas” 
    Main character-Jack Reno 
    Jack’s a reforming white-collar criminal who wants to go straight but nobody wants him to, 

    My Uncle Bob used to say when you’re wrestling a gorilla you don’t get to quit when you’re tired, you can only quit when the gorilla is tired. He formulated this world view as he did most of his others, from the experience of being a legendary car salesman. Some said the best that Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania had ever seen. 
    Like all his other observations I came to realize the truth in this one as that old gorilla wore me down time and again; three ex-wives, and seven years in prison for starters. (Interesting that I put the ex-wives before prison.)

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  • Ivis Bo Davis

    Ivis Bo

    Ivis Bo Davis

    Novelist of Science Fiction

    XTERRA Conspiracy – 
    Lead character – Edward Todd Ward II – 

    Three teens, chosen for the first interstellar expedition become embroiled in conflict with the most powerful men on Earth when they discover the powerbroker’s plans for the new world. 

    The Earth sparkled in blue and white splendor, spinning slowly against the black, diamond-studded velvet of space. Sixteen-year-old Todd Ward was floating in observation lounge 12/36/3Q of the great interstellar colony ship Triznov. The big quartz view plate was all that separated him from the cold vacuum of space. Todd marveled for the umpteenth time at the beautiful planet below him and thought once more, It sure doesn’t look like it’s dying…

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  • Umberto Tosi

    Umberto

    Umberto Tosi

    Writer, editor, publisher, online publishing consultant

    My tale begins like that of my prince long years ago now, when I see a ghost. But it is not the ghost of Hamlet’s father. This ghost appears not as a grim shade, but in the pleasing form of our poor maddened, Ophelia. Drowned, then buried she was, we all know, but now she appears before my incredulous eyes whole and transformed. Could I have seen only a reflection of my own longing? No good can come of this, I said to myself, but yet, pressed on to know the truth, at what cost I could not know. … 

    “Ophelia Floats” – Horatio falls for Ophelia lookalike “Olivia” traveling with the very players that his late prince Hamlet used to catch the conscience of the king. If she is truly Ophelia and her drowning was staged, the boy with her may well be the rightful heir to the Danish throne occupied now by Fortinbras – and in grave danger.

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  • Len Robertson

    Len

    Len Robertson

    Independent Writing and Editing Professional

    REVELATIONS a sci fi novel, which will be published on July1, takes place in 2046, several decades after first official contact with another civilization, a brief Renaissance followed by a quarantine, and the assassination of Jennifer Strand’s father because of a controversial book he wrote titled “Manifest Destiny” and one even more devastating book that had disappeared with his death. Boone Dalton, a damaged athlete (who might actually be the next step in evolution) has found Strand’s missing book. That’s where the story begins: 

    October 2046 
    Ius Chasma, Mars 

    The wall screen in Jennifer Strand’s lab brightened as she entered the room. A message in large block letters spread across the screen. “Jennifer,” it read, “I think you need to see this.” 

    See what, Jennifer wondered? “Ulysses,” she commanded the Ius Chasma’s central server. “Display any attachments.” 

    Nothing. “Ulysses, display attachments.” 

    The screen remained blank 

    Another message spread across the screen. “Password. The scientist that’s your mother’s namesake.” 

    What? Oh. “Marie Curie.” 

    The screen continued blank. 

    The message had to have come from Boone Dalton, Jennifer groused to herself. The man could be so old-fashioned at times. “Ulysses. On-screen keyboard.”

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  • Linda Quinteros

    Linda

    Linda Quinteros

    Artist at Self Employed Writer and Artist

    Lightning blazed across the night sky, illuminating dead trees and a small figure huddled against a rock wall. Dharkhawke scowled at the lightning, trying to convince herself that beginning her Ng’mah now was her choice. She huddled closer to the wall, her light eyes scanning the area for some kind of shelter. She had begun her coming of age journey earlier in the day and had come to the Burloi Valley shortly before the lightning storm began. The valley had given way to a less used trail which led down into the Harpy’s Nest. The path ended at a lake. 

    Dharkehawke: The Shattering 
    Main Character: Dharkhawke 
    Genre: Fantasy 
    How one young woman can change a world

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  • Tammye Dunn

    Tammye

    Tammye Dunn

    CEO at Your Wellness Guide

    Today, David knew that his world would change forever. He was finally going to marry his paramour after four years of courtship. Josette …..just the sound of her name conjures visions of warm, lazy summer afternoons, spent laying upon the hand sewn quilt his grandmother had made for her own wedding, whispering sonnets and chasing the rays of the sun with your fingers as it slowly disappears behind the thicket of trees at the edge of his families property….. 

    “Snap out of it man! It is your wedding day Dude!” says Bryon as he slaps David on the back. 

    Title: Blood Relations 
    Main Character: David James 
    Genre: Thriller 

    David had seen the trucks of equipment; and counted the FBI agents that were present, endless questions raced through his mind…This was something straight out of 1934 Sicily.

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  • George Wilder  Jr.

    George

    George Wilder Jr.

    Author, Writer, and Parent

    My eBook ‘Crying at the Moon.’ It is a great reading memoir of my life. It is an engrossing tale, funny, emotional, and is fill with straight talk. Check it out.

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  • Robin F. Gainey

    Robin F.

    Robin F. Gainey

    JACK OF HEARTS by Robin F. Gainey

    JACK OF HEARTS, main character (narrator) Shimoni; Mayhem ensues when the family dog discovers his master’s infidelity. Chapter One: The week had been stormy in every way, but morning arrived with the optimism of dry windowpanes. Il Conte approached the Contessa as we were about to leave for our first walk of the day. A hopeful sign. There’d been little touching for a long time. 
    Not like the beginning. There once was hardly space for even a small dog to slip between them. Now, great chasms opened on the bed and the couch was never occupied by more than one. 
    The mood must have struck the Count as pleasant weather tends to fortify an impulse.

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  • Bruce Louis Dodson

    Bruce Louis

    Bruce Louis Dodson

    Photography – Fiction – Poetry

    Lost In Seattle 

    It’s almost 4 a.m. Three hours of clean-up left to go. Lunch time’s about to end, but I can’t eat. I’m totally exhausted, covered with white flour dust and stink of lard that we’ve been wiping off the ovens, ductwork, and conveyors. It was a mistake to take this temp job—an act of desperation, but who knew? It’s hard to find a decent job at my age. I turned fifty-three last April and regaining my once middle-class existence won’t be easy, but I will. I’ve got to. I slug down another cup of weak machine-made coffee.

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  • Michael Mullin

    Michael

    Michael Mullin

    Principal at Gemiknight Studios, LLC

    Some cool stuff here. thanks to all who have shared! (No, that’s not the beginning of my book.)

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  • Bruce Kubec

    Bruce

    Bruce Kubec

    Sales & Marketing Professional

    Working title – Lust 

    “Mister, you okay?” a scraggy face, about three inches away, asked. The questioner knelt on one knee, concerned look. His breath smelled of a breath mint. His clothes were dirty, ill-fitting of a typical homeless person. 

    Instead of answering, the man seated on the ground surveyed the surroundings. Brick wall against his back. Dumpster to the left. Concrete street straight ahead. No, too narrow for a street, must be an alleyway. Brick building across the alley. Peeling paint, barred, filthy windows on the building. Green, milky liquid trickling into the alley’s sewer. Stench of rotting garbage and stale urine. Bad neighborhood.

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  • Bruce Kubec

    Bruce

    Bruce Kubec

    Sales & Marketing Professional

    The Gift 

    Sitting at the big conference room table, Moose thought about how he enjoyed living in Longwood, a suburb of Orlando. This past weekend, he played 18 holes of golf on Saturday and picnicked with Alexis at the beach on Sunday. If he still lived in Pittsburgh, he would have experienced the bone-chilling cold, rain and wind. The high each day in The Burgh barely made it to thirty-five. Yes, it was a wise decision to move to Florida twenty years ago. 

    His musings were interrupted by Norma. “Moose, did you hear what I said? I just discovered this morning that we were hacked last Wednesday.”

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  • Bruce Kubec

    Bruce

    Bruce Kubec

    Sales & Marketing Professional

    The Team 

    The words still echoed in his mind. “You have big problems in Pittsburgh. If you don’t fix them fast, you’re going to lose it all before summer.” Richard Yasowich, financial guru, seldom looked happy, but he’d looked particularly dour when he delivered the ominous message. 

    The surprise warning created a hollow feeling in Roosevelt Truman “Moose” Moesel’s stomach. 

    On the sidewalk outside Richard’s downtown Orlando office building, Moose looked at his watch. Their meeting had taken longer than expected, which meant Alexis had already arrived at Carbonari’s Ristorante Italiano. He hurried the two blocks down Orange Avenue to the eatery. Just before opening the heavy wooden door, he decided to keep the bad news to himself, at least for a while. No need for Alexis to worry, too.

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  • Rebecca Morton

    Rebecca

    Rebecca Morton

    Grants Assistant at Visiting Nurse Association of Central Jersey

    “A Royal Affair”- Chick Lit. Main character Ally Cole is a reporter covering the wedding of her ex-boyfriend…the heir to the British throne. 

    BEEP, BEEP! 
    Ally looked up to see the red double decker bus barreling down Baker Street towards her now immobile body frozen in place mid-stride in the crosswalk. 
    Crap, she thought, my first day in London and I’m going to be squashed by a bus. 
    Allison Cole had only been in London for a little more than 24 hours. She had dreamed of taking part in her college’s study abroad program since she received that acceptance letter her senior year of high school, and finally a few years later Ally had managed to save enough money to get here.

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  • Donna S

    Donna

    Donna S

    Author & Freelance Writer

    Each of us plan our lives, then suddenly something unexpected happens, and our lives go in a different direction. For me, it was having a baby who almost died at birth due to a medical mistake. He survived and in so doing, this career climber became a Stay-at-Home mom trying to find her way and finding little support for the creative choices I made. But, like dominoes, everything started falling into place–well, until the next crossroad came about. I share my 13 lessons in MommyBest: 13 Inspirational Lessons Derek & Dylan’s Mom (& maybe yours) Never Learned in School. To help other moms (and dads) I wrote the book in a unique format of Quick Lesson + Poignant Memoir + Reader Reflection Page (so you can jot down some personal notes to your child as a keepsake). MommyBest was nominated by Foreword Book of the Year Award. Thanks!

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  • Beverly Ovalle

    Beverly

    Beverly Ovalle

    Postmaster, Co-Creator at SSLYblog

    When Lightning Strikes. Levi is the main character. 
    Levi came to the sacred glen his family had guarded for generations looking for the reason to continue to protect it; Daphnaie is sent to show him why. 

    Levi got a glorious show, a totally unexpected once in a lifetime shot. He had set up his camera for some nature shots in the glen his grandpa had always talked about, wanting to capture just a little more than a quick click of the camera. He was hoping to immortalize the reason his family had protected this land so long. He put his camera up on a tripod and had just set it up for a time exposure. He was looking through the lens when a lightning bolt suddenly struck the tree in front of him momentarily blinding him.

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  • Mark Battle

    Mark

    Mark Battle

    Writer

    Skirmish: 
    When, at the age of twenty on your second ever tour in a back street Reggae club. You go out on stage and confront an understandably irate black guy that is pissed off and stealing all your gear because he has been waiting for six hours for the artist that he has paid good money to see to show up. Then presses a four inch flick knife blade against your neck, this is not really an experience that you thought you were going into the music business for.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Tammye–Good start. I would read it. 
    Mark–Whoa! Violence right from the beginning! Great! 
    Beverly–after I read you 1st 100, I said, “and then what?” That’s what an intro should do! Good! 
    Donna–this book is long overdo!! 
    Rebecca–Well? Does she get hit? Great hook. 
    Bruce Kubec–“Pittsburgh” caught my eye, since I’m a Pittsburgher, but that whole sentence opens up a lot of interest. Cold in Pgh? That’s why I’m in Clearwater, FL. All three titles are interesting. I’d read them. 
    Bruce Dodson–I can relate! I would read this. 
    Robin–The first 100 tells a story. Great beginning.

  • David Brown

    David

    David Brown

    Designer, Writer and Illustrator

    To all out there I hate that this blog hasnt been used in a while it was so interesting to see what we all were working on.

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  • Heather Marie Schuldt

    Heather Marie

    Heather Marie Schuldt

    Published Author

    David, it’s good to connect with other writers by showing some of our writing style.

    Here is the link to June Saloon, where you can post around 750 words in a monthly short story challenge…

    http://www.linkedin.com/groups/JUNE-SALOON-Short-Story-Contest-4731526%2ES%2E245943292?qid=3515105a-d6af-4050-bddd-0b01a1621b42&trk=group_most_popular-0-b-ttl&goback=%2Egmp_4731526

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  • Victor D. Lopez

    Victor D.

    Victor D. Lopez

    – Professor with executive experience in higher education; Attorney; Author of numerous law-related books and articles

    God spoke to me last night. No, I am not schizophrenic or a Jesus freak. Nor am I a 
    conspiracy theorist (well, except for JFK’s assassination, of course–unless 
    the principles of quantum mechanics somehow apply to bullets fired from book 
    depositories with inhuman rapidity to perform a dance macabre through the 
    bodies of governors before striking their intended target), but I know 
    precisely the series of events that will result in the end of the world and 
    will eventually give birth to a new universe. It came to me in a dream. No, 
    really, it did. 

    Title: End of Days [From Book of dreams 2nd Edition: Science Fiction and Speculative Fiction Short Stories (C) 2012] 
    Main Character: Narrator

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  • Jennifer Morris

    Jennifer

    Jennifer Morris

    Experienced in Arts Industry, Customer Service and Administration

    Ravensreach by Hester Vane 

    The moonlight pierced through the darkness, lighting the way down, the long, looming hallway. The echo of a deep, enraged voice had awoken Little Leo from his sleep. He wanted the noise to stop; but it would not. So, he had gotten out of bed, slipped out of the door and gone in search of his Mother and Father to tell them of the furious echo. 
    “You cannot do this…” 
    “I do not have a choice…” 
    The dark wooden floor was bitter under Little Leo’s feet but, he continued to walk through the strange house with the gruesome gargoyles that lived on the stairs. 

    The main character is called Leonard Tarkington and Ravensreach is a Victorian gothic tale in which Leonard is invited to attend his Uncles funeral in the remote and mysterious city of Ravensreach

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  • Len Robertson

    Len

    Len Robertson

    Independent Writing and Editing Professional

    The formatter i have been working with won’t be available until August 22 so Revelations will be delayed until after Labor Day. Actually, that gives me more time to promote the book and add a tiny bit of polish.

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  • Christine Mazurk

    Christine

    Christine Mazurk

    Published Author

    Great way to connect with other writers. I’ve enjoyed reading the excerpts!

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  • Heather Marie Schuldt

    Heather Marie

    Heather Marie Schuldt

    Published Author

    Victor, Jennifer, Len, and Christine – thanks for posting. There’s a two day countdown for the June Saloon challenge. Deadline for June Saloon is June 25, 2013. If you can’t make it this month, July is right around the corner.

    http://www.linkedin.com/groups/JUNE-SALOON-Short-Story-Contest-4731526%2ES%2E245943292?qid=3515105a-d6af-4050-bddd-0b01a1621b42&trk=group_most_popular-0-b-ttl&goback=%2Egmp_4731526

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  • Louise Pennington

    Louise

    Louise Pennington

    Novelist, scriptwriter, playwright…

    “As Imogen prepared her notes, the girl who would ruin her life was making coffee. 
    The aroma wafted through the open plan office from the staff kitchen: a small, windowless room – no trimmings, very clean – like a hospital, but smelling of coffee beans instead of anaesthetic. 
    Crystal liked the way she could close the door on the world outside and make something warm and welcoming for those sitting waiting at their desks – generally the line managers, or even the boss himself, if she was lucky. And she always made them wait…”

     Michelle LommenMira Prabhu and 4 others like this

  • Starr Reina

    Starr

    Starr Reina

    Author/Editor at QueenWriter.com

    “The Other Side: Melinda’s Story” ~ I tried to tell them it was going to happen, but nobody would listen. They all said I was just having bad dreams, or that I was crazy. 
    It started at my father’s funeral. It’s been so long since it first began, about eight years ago. Sometimes though, it seems like yesterday. My father was there. No, I don’t mean just in the casket. He was there. He talked to me, begged me to tell Mom that we all needed to run and hide. He said we were all in danger. 

    Main Characters is Melinda James. Summary: Melinda’s dead father warns her from the ‘Other Side’ that killers are getting too close for comfort.

     Mira PrabhuScott Davis and 3 others like this

  • Louise Pennington

    Louise

    Louise Pennington

    Novelist, scriptwriter, playwright…

    Appreciate that you like my first hundred words. It’s actually a completed novel and is currently getting a reading. Working title is ‘The Girl Who Never Was’, but think will change…

     Michelle Lommen likes this

  • Philip Mann

    Philip

    Philip Mann

    Author at large

    Louise. 

    It sounds very intriguing. What`s it about ?

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  • Louise Pennington

    Louise

    Louise Pennington

    Novelist, scriptwriter, playwright…

    My synopsis opens like this: “A girl without a birth certificate, without a passport, without anything that officially acknowledges her existence manages to get hired as a temp to communications giant BJM. Joany, who prefers to be known as Crystal, is not actually there to work, she’s there to create the sort of chaos someone with a massive chip on their shoulder is uniquely qualified to do…” And so on!

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Starr–great beginning. Stole my interest immediately. 
    Louise–your first 100 are interesting as well. “The girl who would ruin her life” is a wonderful description to draw interest.

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  • Louise Pennington

    Louise

    Louise Pennington

    Novelist, scriptwriter, playwright…

    Many thanks, Carole!

  • Len Robertson

    Len

    Len Robertson

    Independent Writing and Editing Professional

    These are the first one hundred words of my novel Awakening, which comes out this winter. 
    Day 1 of Year 1 CE (Common Era) 

    Bill Hargrove, analyst on duty at the Discovery Institute’s San Francisco’s think tank known informally as the Brain Cave, looked up in surprise as Sanjay Khan, one of the Cave’s few astronomers, burst into the room. “No one remembers what we do five minutes later,” he laughed, pointing at the wall and ceiling video screens alive with numbers and figures. “Why the rush?” 

    Sanjay looked past Bill, which was made easier by the fact that at more than two meters tall he towered over the squat, heavyset analyst. The man might be adept when it came to tracking the Institute’s many endowments on the world markets, but he could be slow about some things. “Remember what I told you about Civilizations the other day?”

     Michelle LommenScott Davis and 1 other like this

  • Starr Reina

    Starr

    Starr Reina

    Author/Editor at QueenWriter.com

    Thanks, Carole Spalino.

     Sylvia Stein likes this

  • Mike Boggia

    Mike

    Mike Boggia

    independent writer at Red Cliffs Studios

    An Officer of Rome 

    Marius Marcus Severus 

    Betrayed, wounded, discharged;, Severus struggles to regain his manhood and face the choice of returning to the legion for revenge, or remaining with his family and in his eyes, lose honor and status. 
    Silver breastplate polished, helmet topped with a red horsehair crest, Pilus Prior Centurion Marius Severus stood at attention, awaiting Pilate’s presence on the fortress’ balcony. The Praefectus of Judea had summoned him to an urgent meeting. I bet Leon reported me over our disagreement two days ago. He outranks me and hates my guts. As prefect of Joppa Castrum, he orders his troops to harass the Jews in and around city. It makes keeping peace in Judea impossible. Unrest means not transferring to a post where my family can join me. The longer I contend with that filii canis,

     Michelle LommenStarr Reina and 2 others like this

  • Christine Mazurk

    Christine

    Christine Mazurk

    Published Author

    Christine Mazurk – Mystical Connections – Coming July 2013 

    Jenna Nichols, a young successful author, uses her psychic abilities to channel Universal messages through her writing. Having blown an interview with Aidan Scott, an all-about-the-facts journalist, she invites him to join her as she researches a building from a dream, believing it to be her next story. She begins uncovering history that could change Aidan’s life as he knows it and shade his black and white world with gray, while threatening to tear her own family apart. Will she continue on this path knowing what she might destroy along the way?

     Michelle LommenGemma Mawdsley and 1 other like this

  • James Lawless

    James

    James Lawless

    Novelist, poet, short story writer, book reviewer and workshop facilitator

    Knowing Women by James Lawless pb and on Kindle, about a vulnerable man Laurence J Benbo, wrongly tainted sexually. 

    A warm September sun shines as Laurence J Benbo, returning the customary smile to the friendly official in the office window, enters through the gate of the Botanic Gardens Dublin. Dapper in his shirt and tie and navy wool overcoat, and wielding his teakhandled brolly, he walks the curving path for his daily lunchtime constitutional. Viewed from the back, one can perceive his grey worsted trousers riding up his short legs revealing thin black cottoned ankles. He walks briskly – for the exercise, but also conscious of his limited time – along the Poplar walk and past the wide canopy of the cork oak under which he often shelters from a shower of rain.

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  • Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Kathryn Chastain

    Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Independent Writer about Environmental Illness

    “YOU DON’T HAVE CANCER.” Those words still ring in my ears. That is what my physician told me. They were meant as words of encouragement in reference to my hysteria at being so sick and having no real answers. It was true, I did not have cancer. I don’t think my doctors at the time realized the scope of my illness. I had been handed a life sentence to something that few around me knew much about or could comprehend how devastating it would be to me. I was sentenced to a life in which I would become a virtual prisoner of my home… 

    “Allergic to Life: My Battle for Survival, Courage, and Hope”

     Michelle LommenGemma Mawdsley and 1 other like this

  • JZ Murdock

    JZ

    JZ Murdock

    Writer / Author of Death of Heaven / Blogger

    I can’t remember if I posted this before, if so, please forgive my oversight. 

    Death of Heaven 

    For many thousands upon thousands of years, Fade had worked up to this point. Looking across the world from the perspective of having seen all of Human history and so very far before that, Fade ascended to the surface and could feel the two young entities rooting around in the dirt. Pulling quickly back so as to not damage them, Fade’s consciousness sadly felt theirs. 
    But it was much too much and pulling back came too late. Fade could feel Reality change, knew their environment had been warped and that this encounter had changed the two young individuals, forever. 

    [99 words] 

    Death of Heaven is a hard book to summarize. It’s not quite like anything I’ve ever read before. Though perhaps so however in the portmanteaux format that it usurps. There are levels going on, upon levels, upon levels, and to explain much at all would be to disassemble it in its entirety. I can only really say that Fade is very old any yet not old at all. He is of the Earth, but not of it at all, though had a hand in creating it, it created him. I tried to throw in everything but the kitchen sink and then threw that in too. Be careful reading this book alone. I wrote the first story this book is based upon, Andrew, in college for Fiction 101. It won me a kind of award or two and kept a couple of my classmates up most of the night. High praise I think. 

    Somehow anyway, the book works. Or so I’ve been told. Someone asked me if I thought I could turn it into a screenplay and I shudder to think. Still, it would be a blast to see on screen one day. :) 

    So to summarize (at all), there are really three beginnings. This, is the second and shortest. I may have posted the first before which is a couple of pages long. The third was once the real beginning and the story really starts there, with two twelve year old boys, Jimmy and James, friends for life. It is they Fade is worrying over in the above passage that is really only twice as long as that in total. And it is they who we follow through the book and beyond, as I’m working on the sequel now as it will be a trilogy with the second book being, Death of Earth. The title of the third perhaps, is obvious.

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  • Scott Amis

    Scott

    Scott Amis

    Historical Fiction Writer

    5 October 1096, the Barony of Vezelay, Southeastern France 

    Knight Thierré de Coudre picked up his longsword and turned it round in the light from the window. The broad steel blade was polished to a fine dull shine. He drew his left thumb along an edge, a thin line of blood appeared, and he smiled. 

    Door hinges screeched and Sergeant Otto Huber stepped into the arming room. “Sire, the monk is soon to arrive.” Thierré nodded and put the sword on the work table. “Otto, I pray God that he’ll convince you to come with me.” 

    The burly sergeant wagged his head slowly. He grinned. “I pray that he’ll not be akin to the last two ragged madmen.” 

    First scene from Volume II of trilogy To Shine With Honor. Thierré de Coudre is a principal character in the opening chapters and he is preparing to depart from France to the Middle East with the armies of the First Crusade.

     Heather Marie SchuldtMichelle Lommen like this

  • Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Kathryn Chastain

    Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Independent Writer about Environmental Illness

    I have a crazy weekend coming up. I look forward to getting back here next week and thoroughly reading all these comments.

     Raj Chawla likes this

  • Nita Couch

    Nita

    Nita Couch

    Writer and Illustrator at Two Sisters Publications,LLC

    Here is my first 100 words of my new book “Over the Mountains”. 

    Our journey was one of beauty, frustration with the GPS system, accidents, and fascination. Sometimes comical, requiring a sense of humor, sometimes tiring requiring patience, and a GPS system that obviously preferred taking us through the largest cities instead of bypassing them. This may not be 100 words but it is the first paragraph. There are a lot of photographs included. My sister Sara and I are the main characters in this experience of our first vacation together. There are humorous parts so watch out, a funny incident may make you laugh.

     Kathryn Chastain TreatMichelle Lommen like this

  • J.R. Helton

    J.R.

    J.R. Helton

    human at life, inc.

    Alright. This is the first paragraph of my literary novel which will be published next spring in 2014 by 7 Stories Press in New York. I worked on it for about 20 years. It’s called “The Jugheads.”

    -1-

    The first thing I drew was Mickey Mouse. I was alone in the house. I had a piece of blue cake, a comic book, Manila paper, and colored pencils. I sat there, at the table. I looked at the linoleum squares. The dirty white refrigerator. It had magnets holding pieces of paper on the door. A daisy magnet. A cow magnet. There was a Bible on the table. I opened the Bible and saw paintings of the apostles, John the Baptist and his head, Moses, Solomon. I knew about Solomon. My mother told me what he did and I thought he was a mean man. I decided to draw him. It took forever. When I was finished, he filled the whole page. Long, black hair hung past his shoulders. A tall red hat. A beard to his waist. I studied the picture. Something was wrong. He looked like a pirate.

    Here’s a copy of the cover, painted by my friend Robert Crumb, if i did this right…https://www.facebook.com/photo.php?fbid=185306448260350&set=a.104810559643273.1169.104802562977406&type=1&theater

     Michelle LommenKathryn Chastain Treat and 1 other like this

  • David

    David Boggis

    Editing staff at International Air Power Review

    Ruger Police Service Six chambered for .357 and for some reason she didn’t even bother to investigate, that was important knowledge although not so important as the certainty that that .357 round would definitely take the whole back of her head off the moment she decided the time was right. Easy as all hell finding it, too, everyone over eighteen in the rambling old mansion outside Boston knew the combination-of-the-month on the gun locker that always reminded her of a spacious, walk-in wardrobe. 
    ‘Yeah, yeah, OK, just tell him to call back ASAP, tell him it’s Zara.’ 

    Main character is Simon Shearer, bodyguard with a heart as well as a gun. 

    Summary: 

    When police in Brittany separate bodyguard Shearer from his motherless fifteen-year-old principal Ned Beame, so that the bad guys seize Ned, Shearer tracks Ned via Varanasi in India to Nevada in western US but can free him only after a shoot-out in the desert.

     Kathryn Chastain TreatMichelle Lommen like this

  • Cindy Sprigg

    Cindy

    Cindy Sprigg

    Author

    The flame from the old oil light cast eerie shadows around the room. The night was still, except for the steady “ping, ping,” sound of the last of the evening’s rain drops, falling from the shack’s roof to join the many before them in the rusty black cast iron pot which was a permanent fixture on the kitchen table. 
    A breeze caught the flame and made the shadows appear alive as they swayed to and fro on the blood soaked walls. 
    A figure sat with his hands held up to the lamp, squinting his eyes in the dim light. 

    COMPOSED IN BLOOD 

    TOMMY 

    When the act of murder is so evil, the story itself becomes an entity that forces its author into feeding it’s blood lust.

     Michelle LommenPeter Bouchier and 2 others like this

  • Heather Marie Schuldt

    Heather Marie

    Heather Marie Schuldt

    Published Author

    Cindy, interesting setting; you did a good job making it sound creepy. Is this a vampire story? Your paragraph made me want to find out more about the “figure”.

     Michelle LommenRaj Chawla and 2 others like this

  • Nina Soden

    Nina

    Nina Soden

    Co-Owner at Quickie’s Gourmet Hot Dogs LLC

    It was after midnight when the police got the call, gun shots heard potential domestic violence. Lucky for Loraline they lived in a small town with very nosey neighbors. Officers Manfra and Tandy were banging on the door in less than ten minutes. “Police, open up!” The fifteen seconds of silence before they broke down the door seemed like a lifetime. “Stand back, we’re coming in.” The house was old, and the rusty hinges snapped off with little effort, sending the wood door slamming against the wall only to end up broken on the floor. 
    “Oh man! Tandy, get in here.” 

    Awaken ~ a Blood Angel novel: Having barely survived her childhood it will take the death of her father for the truth of her true bloodline to come out.

     Raj ChawlaMichelle Lommen and 1 other like this

  • Nina Soden

    Nina

    Nina Soden

    Co-Owner at Quickie’s Gourmet Hot Dogs LLC

    The blaring of the alarm could have woken the dead, but Alee didn’t even flinch. It was the pounding on her bedroom door that finally jolted her back to life. “Aleerah, wake up. You have to leave in twenty minutes.” It was her mother. Not the mother she had known and loved all her life, no this was the mother that she never even knew existed until a few weeks ago… until the man she called daddy, the man she knew as her father died… suddenly and way too early in life. 

    Beginnings ~ a Blood Angel novel: If she thought hunting in the wild and drinking blood was bad, what will Alee think when she becomes the hunted?

     Scott AmisMichelle Lommen and 2 others like this

  • Debbie McClure

    Debbie

    Debbie McClure

    Author/Public Speaker

    Claire Jacobs lay panting, eyes closed, as she sucked in breaths of over-heated air into her lungs. The feel of a masculine hand running along her sides and up toward her still heaving breasts elicited a giggle in response to the light tickle. 
    “Richard, stop it. I can hardly breathe as it is without you adding to it,” she chided with a laugh, slapping his hand away. 
    “Forgive me love. I cannot stop touching you, or revelling in your ability to touch me. My fingers seem to want to continue exploring your delightful contours,” Richard Abbotsford, the ghostly resident of Kent Estate replied laconically. 

    In The Spirit Of Forgiveness – Sir Richard Abbottsford – The continuing story of betrayal, murder, mystery, and a love that wouldn’t die, between handsome ghost, Sir Richard Abbottsford and visiting guest, Claire Jacobs.

     Kathryn Chastain TreatMichelle Lommen and 1 other like this

  • David

    David Boggis

    Editing staff at International Air Power Review

    Hi, Heather Marie, can you help? I can find a way to comment but not a way to post, and I’d like to add a post, please.

  • Scott Amis

    Scott

    Scott Amis

    Historical Fiction Writer

    David – Just copy the text you want to post and then paste it into the comment space.

  • Nancy Eckert

    Nancy

    Nancy Eckert

    A TASTE FOR TRUTH (is a passion which spares nothing – Albert Camus) 

    Thistle Brown 
    (Note: This is why I don’t like a mere 100 words – and I don’t write thrillers). 

    The last time I’d seen Winkie was only weeks ago when she had been fitted for her bridesmaid’s dress. I had made the event into a celebration, a rare opportunity to be with my friend, my best friend since always. After the fitting, I’d treated her to a sumptuous luncheon at the Ambassador East’s Pump Room. I had ordered everything ahead of time because Winkie would have ordered tea and toast, unwilling to accept my largesse. When she had married, I hadn’t expected a transition from my best friend to someone’s wife.

     Michelle LommenScott Amis and 3 others like this

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Nina–Such a good beginning. I definitely want to read the book. Both sound good. 
    Debbie–love those first 100. 
    Cindy–good descriptive writing. 
    Nancy–the first 100 got me interested. Have I read this before?

     Debbie McClureNina Soden like this

  • Ann Vogel

    Ann

    Ann Vogel

    Freelance Writer at various

    When Satan Throws Lemons At You, Throw Them Back 
    This is a Bible Study/Devotional Book about the difficult times in life. 

    I have had enough experiences in my life to know that when things finally seem to be going well or I think I finally have figured out what the Lord wants me to do, sometimes, everything collapses. 
    Many of us had tough childhoods. Many of us have tough circumstances now. In reality, everyone goes through hard times. The cliché is, “When life gives you lemons, make lemonade,” but 99.99 percent of the time, that does not work. Most of the time, the “lemons” cannot be fixed with all the sugar in the world. At such times, we have two choices: either jump in a hole, letting the lemons rot all around us, or run to our heavenly Father and watch what He can make of the lemons and us.

     Scott AmisAyesha Karim and 4 others like this

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Ann–A wonderful beginning. It would grab any reader’s interest.

  • Ann Vogel

    Ann

    Ann Vogel

    Freelance Writer at various

    Thanks, now buy the book when it comes out! : )

  • Cindy Sprigg

    Cindy

    Cindy Sprigg

    Author

    SORRY…RE-POST. I just realized that the title and the name of the main character were too close together, making it all appear as the title.

    Gone are the lush forests of my youth. The trees now stand bare of leaves as if locked within winters spell and the clear running streams that once meandered their way through the Kingdom have long since dried up. I myself spent many a lazy day frittering away the hot summer hours, lost in dreams at the edge of one of these streams, as a worm at the end of my line teased a trout into biting. 
    As the morning sun burned the mist off the hilltops that surrounded the castle walls, I could hear the sound of hooves on the stones

    UPON THE FINS OF A UNICORN…………………………………………………………………. MANDOLIN

    Set against a lush background of unicorns, knights and castles, the story follows the fate of a kingdom and two star crossed lovers.

     Scott AmisMichelle Lommen and 2 others like this

  • Cindy Sprigg

    Cindy

    Cindy Sprigg

    Author

    I was going to post here about my new children’s picture book, but this form would not let me.
    I was only trying to paste in 10% of the first illustration, because, you know how much a picture is worth…

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  • Melanie Cameron

    Melanie

    Melanie Cameron

    Director of Operations at Hawaii Active Learning Academy

    Title: Burt, The Curious Dove 
    This is a children’s picture book based on a true story of a spotted dove who decided to try finding food inside of a house. 

    Once upon a time there was a curious Spotted Dove named Burt. Burt liked to fly. He liked to explore. 

    But most of all Burt liked to eat. He liked to eat the bugs he found in the tree bark. He liked to eat the seeds he found in the grass. 

    One day Burt discovered a new kind of food – one he didn’t have to hunt for. 

    The only problem with this food was there always seemed to be ferocious hunters around it! 

    These hunters made hissing noises and meowed whenever Burt tried to come near the food. 

    Pictures accompany each section of print.

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  • Kim Parrish

    Kim

    Kim Parrish

    very good

    “Maynard and Zeke: A Liar’s Playground”: come join in in this twisted tale of an intervening narrator who manipulates his protagonist-imaginary twin brother, Maynard Tomm and his foul-mouthed pet talking zebra, Zeke, through a host of strange adventures as they struggle with flashes of espionage and even pterodactyls in their crazy ‘zoo’ of a neighborhood!Zebras can’t talk! Psst…,Don’t tell that to Zeke…And Zeke is not the only pet in the Tomm house!
    -And now for the boring introductory stuff: a penniless author often uses cheap beginnings.
    “CUT! Wait a minute here…! You can’t just start a novel with the coordinating
    conjunction’and’. It was the director, again, a real grammatical referee and clearly high-strung A. R.
    “and Why the hell not!?”I scowled at him and continued on my merry way. Now, where was I? Oh, yes, I was about to introduce my imaginary twin-brother, Maynard Tomm who happens to be the protagonist of this massive lie(oops-fiction!) Kim Parrish

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  • Teresa Steward

    Teresa

    Teresa Steward

    Director of HR at Bassham Foods

    Forever At His Mercy- Main characters: Drake and Meagan 
    Meagan sifted through the embers and gray smoke rising from the remains of what was once a caravan of dreams. Dreams of the people that had set out to make a new home for themselves in a better place. They had packed everything they owned into wagons and headed in the direction of promise. But now the same wagon trail that had held that promise was scattered with bodies, arrows, and blood. The sight of it all made her stomach turn. 
    It seemed only a short while ago that they had stopped here to rest the horses and eat before traveling on. Meagan had excused herself to attend to personal matters behind a large thicket of bushes when she heard it; the most dire cry she had ever heard.

     Scott AmisMichelle Lommen and 4 others like this

  • Bruce Louis Dodson

    Bruce Louis

    Bruce Louis Dodson

    Photography – Fiction – Poetry

    Willie in Bangkok 

    Bangkok had turned on him like a pissed cobra. The city that for days had offered near total bliss of cheap pussy and drugs had changed overnight into a fifthly urban ghetto. He’d forgotten his compass that morning and became lost on the way back to his hotel amidst the stifling heat, traffic noise and sidewalks crammed with people spilling into streets jammed with cars trucks and motor scooters, all pumping their black exhaust into the already polluted air. The canals listlessly carried a rank cargo of garbage to unknown destinations, or maybe it would just float there forever.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Melanie–I’m really hoping that yours is a children’s book. If so, it’s terrific. 
    Bruce–wonderfully descriptive! 
    Teresa–Very moving first 100. Good start. 
    Kim–Very interesting beginning.

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  • Ron Button

    Ron

    Ron Button

    I am marketing my book.Poems and short stories.I will boast,women like what I write.I’m batting a 100%

    Hi Carole. If children’s stories interest you,I’m considering sending one I wrote to my agent.

    Sent from my LG Mobile

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    I was kidding. I mean, I was hoping that Melanie’s book wasn’t for adults. I do like children’s books for children. I have a 10-yo grandson who likes to read and I buy him lots of books.

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  • Sylvia

    Sylvia McIvers

    Writing Tutuor at Touro College

    Anna bounced along the hard dirt road. She was three days short of her thirteenth birthday – cousin George hadn’t left Ferndale until he turned fifteen. But she already learned everything Thistle could teach her, and Anna McKinley frantically needed to learn more. 
    Thistle had walked with her for a mile out of Ferndale. Mother had to take care of the gardens and vegetable shop, of course. That was very important. Besides, a witch, even newly-graduated, didn’t need to hold hands with … anyone. A familiar pounding started in Anna’s head, and she looked around gleefully. With no townsfolk around, she didn’t have to pretend her magic was tame. 

    100 words = 2 paragraphs. I didn’t realize so much had been packed in there!

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Sylvia–A lot packed in there, yes, but a good basis to gain interest.

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  • Melanie Cameron

    Melanie

    Melanie Cameron

    Director of Operations at Hawaii Active Learning Academy

    Mine is definitely a children’s picture book, with facts about spotted doves included.

  • Soji Obebe

    Soji

    Soji Obebe

    Deputy Director (Admin) at Ogun-Oshun River Basin Dev Authority

    Title: Where lies the honour? 
    Publisher: Caltop Publications Nig Ltd, Abuja, Nigeria 
    Main Character: Allen Akun, a state governor 
    Summary: The story is a reminder to public office holders that their past may haunt them. 

    Not quite three months after he was sworn in, rest of mind began to elude Governor Allen Akun of Bagua State in the Federal Republic of Geriana. His broad smiles at public functions became mere veneers for the trauma within. What was the problem? The Society for Sanity in Polity(SSP), a respected human rights organisation in the state was asking him to vacate his gubernatorial seat. The members of the society threatened employing all means at the disposal to make the governor’s seat unduly hot for him if their demands were ignored. They said they would organise sate-wide workers ‘strike and students’ class boycotts.

     Kathryn Chastain TreatMichelle Lommen like this

  • Louise Pennington

    Louise

    Louise Pennington

    Novelist, scriptwriter, playwright…

    Thanks for liking, Scott – “As Imogen prepared her notes, the girl who would ruin her life was making coffee…” Seems to be going down well! 

    Otherwise, currently have two books republished in eBook format through Amazon and also Hodder & Stoughton: The Stalking of Eve and Jessica’s Lover – both dark, both thrillers…

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  • Scott Amis

    Scott

    Scott Amis

    Historical Fiction Writer

    Louise – Thank you. Your first line pulls me right in; continuing material well written and story gains depth and interest quickly.

  • Nina Soden

    Nina

    Nina Soden

    Co-Owner at Quickie’s Gourmet Hot Dogs LLC

    Louise – I love the first line. It makes me want to know more about Imogen and the mysterious girl making coffee.

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  • Nina Soden

    Nina

    Nina Soden

    Co-Owner at Quickie’s Gourmet Hot Dogs LLC

    Sylvia – There is a lot going on in those first two paragraphs, but I’m hooked. I’m a huge fan of the witch, vampire, shape shifter, etc. books… I want to read more about Anna, the witch!

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Soji–very interesting. I sensed tension immediately.

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Melanie–what age group do you write for?

  • Melanie Cameron

    Melanie

    Melanie Cameron

    Director of Operations at Hawaii Active Learning Academy

    Carol, the picture books are geared towards pre-school through elementary school age. I do have a couple of books almost ready to publish that are written for kids ages 8-14.

  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    Oh cool! Let me know when hey are available. My grandson is 10.

  • Melanie Cameron

    Melanie

    Melanie Cameron

    Director of Operations at Hawaii Active Learning Academy

    I’ll do it! Thanks for being so encouraging! Maybe I’ll post excerpts from a couple of the others. I self-publish and help others do the same. I’m currently helping 5 young authors get their books ready for publication and helping an older woman publish some family history books. My picture book, Where Is Melina, will be published sometime next week. I’m waiting for the proof copy. It is geared towards preschoolers.

  • Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Kathryn Chastain

    Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Independent Writer about Environmental Illness

    Louise – I love how this starts out. It sounds like something I would definitely want to read.

  • Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Kathryn Chastain

    Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Independent Writer about Environmental Illness

    J.R – I like the wonderful descriptions and your cover.

  • Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Kathryn Chastain

    Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Independent Writer about Environmental Illness

    Melanie – I love children’s books. I am always looking for new ones for my grandchildren.

  • Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Kathryn Chastain

    Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Independent Writer about Environmental Illness

    Okay – I have made it through the list. Some wonderful book beginnings.

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  • Louise Pennington

    Louise

    Louise Pennington

    Novelist, scriptwriter, playwright…

    Thanks for the ‘like’, Nina. The manuscript is complete and I’m just giving it the once over…

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  • Louise Pennington

    Louise

    Louise Pennington

    Novelist, scriptwriter, playwright…

    Thanks for the ‘like’, Kathyrn. As I’ve told Nina, the manuscript is complete, so hopefully you’ll have a chance to read the whole thing!

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  • Caroline McMullan

    Caroline

    Caroline McMullan

    Struggling novelist at Home writer

    Mother in a Mood! 
    Extract: ( a tad over the 100 ) 

    I had it all planned out. In my head I was going to be their rock, their sounding board, their haven from the rigors of the study hall. They would come home to nutritious, wholesome, life-giving home cooked meals and happily discuss their on-going study plans before disappearing upstairs to grab a couple of hours more study. 

    How could I have been more wrong? My once mild mannered, deliciously charming daughter turned into the bride of Satan. There was gnashing of teeth, tearing of hair, loud stomping steps everywhere and the obligatory banging of doors. The world was her enemy and I was its commander-in-chief. 
    How many times do you have to hear the words ‘you just don’t understand the pressure I’m under? ’ before you question yourself as to whether you actually do understand? As for the nutritious, wholesome, life-giving home cooked meals! ‘How can you expect me to eat food at a time like this?’ Bang went that theory! 

    As for the Gav-Meister; well, he was the complete opposite, his mantra was simpler, ‘Chill-out mum, I have it covered…What’s for dinner?’

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  • Nina Soden

    Nina

    Nina Soden

    Co-Owner at Quickie’s Gourmet Hot Dogs LLC

    Caroline your book Mother in a Mood isn’t in the normal genre that I read, but being a mother “in a mood” it has really peeked my interest. Is it already published or something you are still working on? I would love to read it to compare your experiences with my own. Maybe I wont feel so alone in the world of mother vs. children. lol

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  • Caroline McMullan

    Caroline

    Caroline McMullan

    Struggling novelist at Home writer

    Nina 
    Thanks, it’s something I have been working on for a while. It’s good to know I struck a chord. We can be very much isolated when it comes to motherhood so it’s nice to know there are more of us out there, Ha! Let you know when its finished.

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  • Nina Soden

    Nina

    Nina Soden

    Co-Owner at Quickie’s Gourmet Hot Dogs LLC

    Caroline good luck with the completion of your book. I will be quietly waiting and eager to read it when its done. If you need any help with the self-publishing route (if you decide to go that way) don’t hesitate to send me a message. Having done two myself (hopefully three – if I can find time to write) I would be happy to help.

     Raj ChawlaCaroline McMullan and 1 other like this

  • Caroline McMullan

    Caroline

    Caroline McMullan

    Struggling novelist at Home writer

    Thanks a mill Nina.

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  • Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Kathryn Chastain

    Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Independent Writer about Environmental Illness

    Louise – Just keep us all updated.

  • Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Kathryn Chastain

    Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Independent Writer about Environmental Illness

    Caroline – I think all of us mothers have been the “Mother in the Mood”. Oh, the banging on the doors. We once removed a bedroom door to stop the banging. Can’t wait to read more.

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  • Caroline McMullan

    Caroline

    Caroline McMullan

    Struggling novelist at Home writer

    Haven’t gotten around to removing doors yet Kathryn but time will tell lol.

  • Teresa Steward

    Teresa

    Teresa Steward

    Director of HR at Bassham Foods

    thanks to everyone who “liked” my post. There are some talented writers here and it’s nice to get feedback.

     Raj ChawlaKathryn Chastain Treat and 1 other like this

  • Sylvia

    Sylvia McIvers

    Writing Tutuor at Touro College

    Nina Soden — I also wanted to find out about her – that’s why I wrote the story ;) 

    First Draft just hit The End, and I started the re-write. So many times, through the chapters – oh, I didn’t know I need that, better put a base for it in previous chapters on the re-write… The re-write is going to be interesting.

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  • Lyn Alexander

    Lyn

    Lyn Alexander

    writer at http://www.lynalexander.com

    From “A Good Soldier”: the fourth in the Schellendorf Historical Series 

    Hitler’s war is over. Lieutenant-General Erich von Schellendorf of the German General Staff is a prisoner-of-war. 
    Exhausted by the collapse of every aspect of his life, and deeply disturbed that he could not moderate the utter destruction of Germany, his only compensation is that he has survived the most destructive war in history. His first desire is to see his miracle child, a ‘war baby’ born to the Englishwoman he once loved and who may not wish ever to see him again. 
    But now that the guns have stopped, Erich must face the judgment of his father and the world at Nuremberg, and ultimately answer his own conscience. 

    First 115 words 
    The drive from the military prison took a good part of an hour while Erich’s two guards kept a stiff silence the whole way. One sat beside him blocking the rear door. The second on the opposite bench braced a rifle casually between his knees, knowing full well that a German general had nowhere in London to flee. 

    He was glad of their silence. He was weary of watching every word he said, weary of wondering what they would do with him. He’d heard rumours of an international tribunal being set up somewhere in Germany. War crimes trials, they called it. 

    Deliberately he shut his mind to it. He had not done any war crimes…

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  • Kimberly Sperling

    Kimberly

    Kimberly Sperling

    Real Estate, Property Management

    One of my newer Flash Fiction stories: “Deceit”. 

    He couldn’t help wondering how it got there. Had she seen it? He had been careful, diligent really. Always making sure he was covering his indecencies at their multimillion dollar home since the other “problem.” Now this. She hadn’t reached for it, although sitting beside it. He caressed her back and moved closer. If he could just distract her for a moment and pick it up, usher it into his pocket. He’d get rid of it. Goddamn women.

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  • Kimberly Sperling

    Kimberly

    Kimberly Sperling

    Real Estate, Property Management

    The beginning of a newer short story: “The Farm” (I have many new pieces out to publishers right now. 

    The long, dark winter was finally coming to a close but the dismal shroud of all that was being reported by the media was hanging in the air. I felt depressed, uncertain. At barely 17 I was contemplating my own mortality and trundling through my last days of high school on autopilot. The destruction of the cities throughout the nation was making me feel as though evil was closing in quickly. I wondered if our town was next.

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  • Scott Amis

    Scott

    Scott Amis

    Historical Fiction Writer

    Kimberly – Is “Deceit” the complete story? 

    Lots happening in very few words in both!

  • Nancy Eckert

    Nancy

    Nancy Eckert

    Please excuse me: I have no idea wht 100 words will tell me much of anything unless someone’se stapped to death in the first page or, at least, the first chapter. 

    What IS this about? I do not pretend to be a glorious writer, but the silliness (sorry) about 100 words is just that: Silly!

  • Gordon Osmond

    Gordon

    Gordon Osmond

    Author, Playwright, Teacher

    “Johnson.” 
    “And where might that be?” Adrian asked, dreading the answer. 
    Syd Mandel, Adrian Conway’s longtime Hollywood agent, tried to appear casual in response. “Ohio.” 
    “Ohio.” Adrian repeated the name as if the territory had not yet been admitted to the Union. 
    Becoming a bit defensive, Syd added a third “Ohio,” adding, “It’s east of here.” 
    “Then why do they call it the Midwest?” 
    “Sorry, A, the real East wasn’t available. Something to do with the economy…or something.” 
    Adrian decided to ignore his agent’s implied reference to the recent trajectory of Adrian’s film career and instead narrowed the focus of the conversation. “And why…Johnson, is it?” 

    This is the first 100 words of my novel, Slipping on Stardust, about the effect on a small town of the arrival of Adrian Conway, a faded “B” movie star. Check out the book’s 11 5-star Amazon reviews.

  • Lyn Alexander

    Lyn

    Lyn Alexander

    writer at http://www.lynalexander.com

    @Nancy 
    I’m with you. It is silly. I posted earlier, probably #1250 in this thread, which no doubt goes totally unnoticed, because writers are so busy trying to dazzle the world (myself included). 
    The request was not for an elevator speech, but for the first 100 words of a story. It really does not work. 
    I actually gave an elevator speech PLUS the first 115 words.

  • Kimberly Sperling

    Kimberly

    Kimberly Sperling

    Real Estate, Property Management

    Scott, they are both the beginning paragraph of 2 of my short stories. “Deceit” is flash fiction (so really short, but longer than the first paragraph of course). :-)

    The request above was for the first 100 words. They are both a little under that, but the first paragraph.

    I didn’t add a summary sentence (as requested above) because they both have twists and a summary would ruin them. I also didn’t add the characters name because both are written first person without stating their own name, (“Deceit” has first and third person) because it is from their own perspective.

    I am working on writing with as much variety in type, kind, characters and style as I can. It’s my own self inflicted current goal.

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  • Scott Amis

    Scott

    Scott Amis

    Historical Fiction Writer

    Thanks, Kimberly…asked because I’ve seen flash fiction @ 100 words. 

    “Deceit” pretty much tells a whole story yet leaves me most anxious to find out what in hell “it” might be. Nice work!

     Kimberly Sperling likes this

  • Michael Reed McLaughlin

    Michael Reed

    Michael Reed McLaughlin

    Available for Prezi, PPT, and Keynote design and layout

    Maxindine the Great sat alone in the highest stone tower of his ancient keep. It was there, in his mystical laboratory, that the wizened wizard now spent the majority of his time. Quietly, peacefully, he read an ancient book as he sat in an embroidered chair smoking a long meerschaum pipe, the bowl of which was carved in the fearsome likeness of a great Red & Black Dragon. Blue-gray smoke swirled lazily about the wizard’s hoary head as one long finger steadily traced the fading words across yellowed parchment. However, peace and tranquility had never been the close friends of Maxindine

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  • William Pipes

    William

    William Pipes

    –Author

    DARBY 

    CHAPTER ONE 
    The sheriff didn’t even get to say why he was there, before Myrtle Woodard was attacking. “If the sheriff wasn’t a-standing in front of you, I’d blow you to kingdom come,” she said, “I’ve a good notion to shoot you both.” Pointing the gun toward Floyd, “It would be good enough for the man who kilt my husband.” 
    “Now, Myrtle, Floyd came here seeking to put a stop to the troubles between your families,” Sheriff Triplett said. “Your husband got killed ten years ago. I investigated the murder of your husband and I can tell you it wasn’t Floyd.”

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  • Kimberly Sperling

    Kimberly

    Kimberly Sperling

    Real Estate, Property Management

    Thanks Scott! I can’t tell you and ruin the story!

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  • Scott Amis

    Scott

    Scott Amis

    Historical Fiction Writer

    Will I ever get to find out what “it” is? Driving me nuts…

  • Maribel McCormack

    Maribel

    Maribel McCormack

    Language Trainers – TESOL

    Interesting! Can you imagine what we could come up with if we took the page of each entry and tore the page, vertically, into 3 strips. We could then put all of these strips next to each other and come up with something unusual. Some of the “beat poets” (mainly, William S. Burroughs) did this with newspapers.

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  • Duragadas Sampath

    Duragadas

    Duragadas Sampath

    S&S consultants as chairman

    Book Title- Wish to belong Want to perform 
    chapter-1 

    The promise of day brought by the eastern sun was seen 
    by Annakka in a haze of red appearing in the horizon. She seldom 
    woke up early; she felt uncomfortable in the dark. During 
    the day, she could see the shapes of objects and make her way 
    around. 
    “Who is it…?” she raised her voice. 
    She could sense shadows near the door. 
    “It is me …” 
    She was relieved to hear the familiar voice of Mangai, her 
    neighbour’s daughter. She knew her from when she was a baby. 

    Summary; 

    Through story telling of actual case studies ,dilaogues between the professor and professional leaders the need to look at organistaions not just as a task group but also 
    as a social community is brought about.Some practises have been highlighetd for adoption by organsiations.

     Romesh ChopraMichelle Lommen like this

  • Louise Pennington

    Louise

    Louise Pennington

    Novelist, scriptwriter, playwright…

    The trouble is we’re all so nice to each other and as much as 100 words may pull you in (and this is important for those doubters out there), it’s the rest of the thing that has to stand up to scrutiny and where this is concerned you are on your own. Writing 100k words of a coherent, interesting, page-turner is far from easy and intelligent criticism essential. Being nice just won’t cut it!

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  • SUGATA Mukhopadhyay

    SUGATA

    SUGATA Mukhopadhyay

    Public Health Physician & Professional Fiction Writer

    Let me see my human face: 

    “Take me off from color 
    Give me freedom from race, 
    Remove my religion tag 
    Let me see my human face.” 

    My first published book (paperback and electronic) ‘Let me see my human face’ contains 15 short stories. Many stories of this book were written raw, coated with the flavor of life at the ground. Some stories are simply product of wild imagination and few were adopted from the pages of history. I tried to depict many characters in the stories, film stars, prostitutes, aspirant youths, ancient kings, struggling woman, disheartened father and others. They lived their lives not much differently from many of us. Quite a few of those characters actually emerged from the stream of real, flesh & blood life as I was unable to overcome the temptation to bring them into limelight. I will remain forever indebted to them. 

    Excerpts from the first story of the book named ‘Superstar’ which is written on the story of the most famous film actor of Bollywood: 

    Your shot is ready Sir’ 

    He turned back to give the most negligent look to Badol, the spot boy. 

    ‘Am not ready. Tell Riju. Need more time’ 

    ‘Are you ok, Sir?’ timid, hesitant Badol managed to ask. 

    ‘Get lost kid’ He concentrated into his blackberry. 

    Badol returned the shooting spot with a cloudy face. 

    ‘What happened?’ Riju was sweating there. Wiped off his face impatiently, twice. 

    ‘He will take some more time’ Badol replied. He knows well Riju will react violently now. 

    ‘Motherfucking superstar, what he thinks of himself? God?’ 

    Few minutes back the producer called him to say hurry up. The project is fastly slowing down. Production cost is rising every day. It is not a poor man’s project. ‘You are taking hell of lot time Riju, be on track man. Don’t play on my hard-earned bucks’. 

    Riju’s first venture, a softy love story of teenagers received good response in the box office. Second movie was a top to bottom ‘masala’ action flick to become an overnight blockbuster. He roped the reigning superstar for his ambitious third project and troubles chasing him since then. 

    The bloody superstar….. 

    He is a compulsory late arrive at the sets, spends hours in the dressing rooms, demands for innumerable re-takes, and leaves neither with a notice nor reasons. A thoroughly whimsical man, pampered, moody, egoistic, arrogant….. complete package of utter nuisance and unprofessionalism. Riju was feeling disgusted. ‘This is just my third film man’

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  • Lee Ann Sontheimer Murphy

    Lee Ann

    Lee Ann Sontheimer Murphy

    Romance author and freelance writer

    The first hundred words of my just released this week contemporary romance, Pink Neon, from Rebel Ink Press. 
    Her sleek 1971 GTO coupe, red as lifeblood, hugged the tight curves and skimmed over the rugged Ozark Mountains, graceful as a soaring hawk. Cecily drove like a demon possessed but she held the road and savored the thrill. Everything important she wanted or needed fit into the two big suitcases and one smaller bag crammed into the trunk. Her new life would begin when she hit Branson, the tourist destination tucked into the southern edge of Missouri, a place she’d heard a lot about but never visited. The curving roads widened as the billboards increased along the narrow shoulders but the drop-offs remained sheer and deadly. .

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  • Elizabeth Levine, M.A., M.P.H.

    Elizabeth

    Elizabeth Levine, M.A., M.P.H.

    Adjunct Professor- English Department

    The title of my memoir is called ONSET. The name of the narrator is Eliza 

    Here are the opening 100 lines from Chapter 1: Brooklyn 1973 

    “I inherited secrets from adults when I turned ten. I carried them with me like a vessel of water perched on my head, not spilling a drop.” 

    The arc of the memoir follows the journey of a ten year old girl over twenty years and multiple geographic locations. It is a tale of PTSD, grief, resiliency and redemption. It does not have a happy ending, per se, but it captures the universal struggle to integrate trauma into how we live our lives, even when what we are left with diminishes our capacity to return to our former lives as we once knew and experienced them.

     Valerie Michele OliverMichelle Lommen and 3 others like this

  • Ron Button

    Ron

    Ron Button

    I am marketing my book.Poems and short stories.I will boast,women like what I write.I’m batting a 100%

    SUGATA. Wonderful words. Brilliant to say the least.

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  • SUGATA Mukhopadhyay

    SUGATA

    SUGATA Mukhopadhyay

    Public Health Physician & Professional Fiction Writer

    Thank you Ron

  • Kimberly Sperling

    Kimberly

    Kimberly Sperling

    Real Estate, Property Management

    Scott, Hahahahaha! I will let you know if it is published. It is out right now with a publisher. It is only a 300 word Flash Fiction, so not too long. 

    Maribel, interesting idea. In one of my writing groups we each contributed to a short story. One person wrote the first chapter, then the next person added the next chapter, and so on. It was a fun exercise and the story was VERY interesting. Half of the group assumed one thing from something one person wrote and the other half interpreted it a different way, so the story was quite wild (and a little inconsistent which would have to be fixed if we ever did anything with it) but actually turned out decent overall and very creative!

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  • Ron Button

    Ron

    Ron Button

    I am marketing my book.Poems and short stories.I will boast,women like what I write.I’m batting a 100%

    Maribel. I like the idea. Fiction and nonfiction. Mysteries of writing.

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  • Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Kathryn Chastain

    Kathryn Chastain Treat

    Independent Writer about Environmental Illness

    I have seen a few complaints that it is only 100 words and cannot depict the entire book or story line. I agree. However we don’t always get much more when searching through Amazon for a book we may want to read. To me it is a snippet of a story that may be enough to draw someone in to want to read the book or know more.

  • Kimberly Sperling

    Kimberly

    Kimberly Sperling

    Real Estate, Property Management

    That’s true, Kathryn, we don’t get much more on Amazon. In fact, most of the time if the story doesn’t catch the readers attention immediately then it gets put back down. I think this thread’s discussion is a great exercise. The elements requested above are elements potential readers would see before buying (summary, character name, beginning of book/story).

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  • Katie Roberts

    Katie

    Katie Roberts

    Contract Technical Writer/Editor at ZELTIQ Aesthetics

    Zasha stood in the witness box. The prosecutor, a man younger than her by some ten years, was waiting for her answer. The jury was leaning forward in anticipation. The defendant, Marcus Cerema, labeled by the press as The Butcher, stood with his head cocked to the right as if listening to some far off music. Although he was in chains, his demeanor was more appropriate to a man watching a mediocre play. In fact, he had given an exaggerated yawn more than once during the proceedings. 
    “Possibly,” she nodded. “He may have been one of my clients.”

    Book Title: The Good Listener
    Main Character: Zasha
    Summary: A professional courtesan has the unusual gift that makes her the perfect listener.

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  • George Wilder  Jr.

    George

    George Wilder Jr.

    Author, Writer, and Parent

    He is a teenager and that can be a handful. I demand that he get up for school each morning on time and make out to the school bus that will be waiting. I demand that he wash his face and hands, put on deodorant have a clean uniform on as he proceeds on down the stairs. I demand that he makes his bed each morning; I demand that he do not eat up all the food in the house. I demand that he that do his homework and other school related projects. I demand that he does not blast his music all through the night so to disturb our neighbors and have the police at our door. I demand that he stop messing up the house every time I clean it up, I demand that he stop watching TV programs and listening to music with violent content. I demand that he read a book each night before going to bed. I demand that he choose good friends. I demand that he stop lying. I demand that he stop saying that I am treating him unfairly. I demand that he does not become part of a gang. I demand that as he grows older not mistreat women. I demand that he not smoke cigarettes and do drugs. I demand that he take a bath to keep from smelling like a fish. I demand that he finds what he is good at and stick with it. I demand that he stop watching dumb TV shows and focus on his life. I demand that he be leader and not a follower. 

    Title: Looking at Myself 
    Main Character: Denver 
    A dad puts demands on his son.

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  • David Tindell

    David

    David Tindell

    Author/martial artist

    No one paid any attention to the woman as she shuffled along the dirt road that was no more a street than the collection of shacks on the nearby waterfront could be termed a village. Yet it was a village, home to a few dozen fishermen and their families. The men were weather-beaten but plucky as they plied the nearby waters in their junks to scrape out a living. Their women were equally hard working as they struggled to raise their few children in some semblance of a home. By comparison, the People’s Liberation Army base was huge and luxuriant. 

    Title: The White Vixen 
    Protagonist: Jo Ann Geary, a Korean-American USAF special forces officer 
    In the early 1980s, Geary’s mission to China to rescue a captured MI6 agent leads to an even more dangerous mission, deep into Argentina to find and eliminate the man who is luring the British fleet into a nuclear trap.

     Raj ChawlaKathryn Chastain Treat like this

  • Nina Soden

    Nina

    Nina Soden

    Co-Owner at Quickie’s Gourmet Hot Dogs LLC

    I’ve seen a number of people complaining that this request for 100 words is silly or that it won’t tell them anything about a story, but as writers we have to understand that often times that is all someone is willing to give a book as they flip the pages on a bookstore shelf, or as they scan the description / free preview from Amazon. 100 words is not a lot, but sometimes that is the only shot you get as an author to prove yourself. I would love to believe that everyone who likes the cover of my book will buy it and read it front to back, but that isn’t the case. 

    My last thought is this – if you think a post on here or a request on here is silly or ridiculous or any other number of things and you don’t want to participate – then why even comment? My mother told me that if you don’t have something nice to say don’t say anything at all. There are a number of people that are enjoying this thread (myself included) and I have read some real talent here. Please don’t complain and ruin it for the rest of us. That is all. 

    Thank you to all you amazing talented writers. 

    Happy writing.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    David–Great descriptions. You give a clear picture of the scenario. 
    Katie–Grabbed my interest. I immediately wanted to know what the trial was about. 
    Elizabeth–I can tell already that it is a sad story. 
    Lee Ann–got me interested. 
    Duragadas–Great beginning. 
    William–Interesting start.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    I have been reading these posts about the value of posting the first 100. It’s true that I say something nice about everyone’s 1st 100, but the is because I don’t think it’s right to openly and publicly give bad criticism to a writer who is in the same position as I am. I will give honest feedback–good or bad–if someone replies to my privately. I have, in the past, sent private messages to some writers when I saw something that was incorrect r could be better. 

    To publicly criticize someone’s work can be humiliating and discouraging to a person. So…..publicly, I praise….privately I critique. And even at that, the only qualification I have for doing so is the awesome English teachers who taught me. I was given a good foundation in grammar, punctuation, spelling, sentence structure, etc.–but it doesn’t make me perfect either.

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  • Heather Marie Schuldt

    Heather Marie

    Heather Marie Schuldt

    Published Author

    Well said, Carole. I agree. I would add onto that and say public humiliation is just as bad as private humiliation. Some writers have thick skin and want an honest critique while other writers might not take it so well. It’s good to remember that a person’s feedback can have a significant amount of “personal opinion”. I’m learning a lot about “how to respond to” reviews, feedback, and critiques; when a person feels crushed, it’s time to connect with positive people and take the high road.

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  • Scott Amis

    Scott

    Scott Amis

    Historical Fiction Writer

    For what it’s worth: I won’t give criticism on this or other public forum. For writers who ask me to read their work and write a review, on a site like amazon and for anything less than four stars, I don’t post at all. Criticism is communicated strictly in private and only at the other person’s request.

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  • Carole Spalino

    Carole

    Carole Spalino

    Romance Writer

    I agree, Scott. Even when asked for honest feedback, there is always a way to be honest and kind at the same time. It’s all in the delivery. What approach is better? (ex): “This should be….etc.” or “Maybe it would be better if you phrased it….” or “Do you think it would sound better if….?” 
    Of course the first example can immediately put someone on the defense. I don’t want to do that. And I would never deliberately hurt someone’s feelings. 

    Having had my own feelings trampled on, shattered, and chewed up and spit out, I know how it feels. I could never hurt anyone like that. My policy is to be kind when being completely honest, and if the honesty is not positive, be honest in private.

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  • Heather Marie Schuldt

    Heather Marie

    Heather Marie Schuldt

    Published Author

    Sorry I missed all the action; no idea what the issue is about. Posting 100 words is a good way to showcase some of your work if you want to. I have a background in directing theater performances, and I’ve sat through many rehearsals listening to one monologue after another. An actor sometimes only has one or two minutes to make the most of their performance. That’s it. Nothing more. Taking feedback in person and in public can even be more heart breaking as most of us have seen Simon Cowell do on American Idol. Simon is known for his blunt and often controversial criticisms, insults, and wisecracks about contestants and their abilities (in person, in public). 

    I happen to agree that positive feedback relating to individual stories is fine in this thread. When I started this thread a long time ago, the purpose was to provide a place where writers can show some of their work in order to make good connections with other writers. 

    Scott has a very good point: Opinions on how to improve are generally done in private. It would be smart to carefully consider who is giving the critique.

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  • Scott Amis

    Scott

    Scott Amis

    Historical Fiction Writer

    Carole – For anyone who asks me to publicly review their work, I always tell them upfront that if I don’t feel I can give good review, I’ll write them privately and tell them why, at their option. On criticism, the delivery is indeed the most sensitive part and I’m near loath to do it. 

    Right now I have Volume I of my trilogy out to a dozen or more advance readers and giving out more when requested. Some heavy criticism and pointed questions have come along with the praise…all I can do is take the bullets and write it all down for later review. 

    Heather – much the same from my days in architectural school…design projects openly reviewed by juries of profs and senior-more students, a couple of minutes or so to make a verbal presentation of graphic work and then they’d let you have it.

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  • Nina Soden

    Nina

    Nina Soden

    Co-Owner at Quickie’s Gourmet Hot Dogs LLC

    Scott – I agree with you on the fact that criticism should be given privately. I have a pretty thick skin – you can’t please everyone and there are going to be people that say mean things about what you write, but doing it in private is so much easier to deal with, and it is easier to walk away and actually gain something from it other than broken self confidence.

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  • Caroline McMullan

    Caroline

    Caroline McMullan

    Struggling novelist at Home writer

    I happen to like the idea of just giving the 100 or so words. After all it’s only a taste, a glimpse into what our work is about and often in life a glimpse is all we get to make an impression on someone. They say we make our minds up in the first 5 seconds of meeting someone or viewing a new project. My take on it is this, if the format is not for you, so be it move on, but it is for a lot of people and good for them. Critique or no, it’s all about support. We are here to support one another in what is by nature, a very diverse field.

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  • Heather Marie Schuldt

    Heather Marie

    Heather Marie Schuldt

    Published Author

    Great way to see it, you guys. Feedback is most delightful when it’s kept positive. I can sometimes find hidden information in negative feedback – it can actually be helpful. My door is always open for feedback, good or bad. I’ve always been a fan of turning lemons into lemonade. Free lemons can be a wonderful thing. :) Cheers to free lemons!

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